Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Also correct verb forms and possessives (e.g., "I'm not really good at...", "I try my best", "what they want").

例: I'm not very good at choosing gifts, but I try my best. For example, I pay attention to my friends' hobbies and recent conversations, so I can pick something they actually want.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then add a specific example. Use correct tense and simpler phrasing. Reduce fillers and ensure logical linking (e.g., 'usually' then 'for example').

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions. For example, I give presents at birthdays, graduation ceremonies, and sometimes at family reunions.

提案: Answer directly and provide a concrete detail. Use correct prepositions and possessives (e.g., 'consider their hobbies and preferences'). Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'so' correctly.

例: I consider the person's hobbies and preferences when choosing a gift. For example, if my close friend enjoys painting, I buy quality brushes or sketchbooks because I know they will use and appreciate them.

提案: Tell a short, clear story with chronological order. Remove hesitation and clarify what you made. Use past tense consistently and pick one or two details about how you made it and the reaction.

例: Yes. When I was 15 I made a decorated diary for a friend. I bought a plain notebook and decorated the cover with drawings and stickers, and my friend loved the personal touch.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then support it with reasons and an example. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors (e.g., 'It depends on the person', 'some people value expensive gifts because...'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

例: It depends on the person. Some people feel valued by expensive gifts because they see them as a sign of effort; however, others prefer meaningful or handmade presents and simply want your presence at their celebration.

× Well I personally not really good at giving a gift but I trying my best when I aiming to give someone presents.

✓ Well, I'm personally not really good at giving gifts, but I try my best when I aim to give someone presents.

Pronoun and verb forms were incorrect: 'I personally not' lacks auxiliary 'am'; 'giving a gift' should be plural 'gifts' for general statement (singular/plural); 'I trying' and 'I aiming' should be 'I try' and 'I aim' to match present tense. Also added commas for clarity. (ID:12)

× So actually I see how they interested in what they what they want, especially my friend, it's easy for me to know their interests.

✓ So actually I look at what they are interested in and what they want. Especially with my friends, it's easy for me to know their interests.

Pronoun and verb structures wrong: 'see how they interested' requires auxiliary 'are' and 'interested' as past participle/adjective; 'what they what they want' is repeated. 'my friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'their'. Clarified sentence structure and pronoun agreement. (ID:12)

× Yes uh, I basically gave a presence to other people when only uh, on their special occasions like graduations ceremony or birthday gift umm, like sometime the reunions umm, party only this occasion.

✓ Yes, I basically give presents to other people only on special occasions like graduation ceremonies or birthdays, and sometimes at reunions and parties.

Tense and word choice: 'gave' should be present 'give' to answer usual habit. 'presence' is wrong word; use 'presents'. 'graduations ceremony' should be 'graduation ceremonies' (plural) and 'birthday gift' should be 'birthdays' or 'birthday parties'. Reordered for natural English and removed extra filler words. (ID:5)

× I personally umm consider on their hobbies and preference.

✓ I personally consider their hobbies and preferences.

Incorrect preposition 'consider on' — correct verb is 'consider' followed directly by object. Also 'preference' should be plural 'preferences' to match 'hobbies'. (ID:11)

× So for example my close friend UMM I know them very well so I know their what they like and what they prefer.

✓ For example, my close friends — I know them very well, so I know what they like and prefer.

Pronoun and word order: 'my close friend I know them' is redundant and mismatched number; changed to 'friends' and combined clauses. 'I know their what they like' is ungrammatical; correct order is 'I know what they like.' (ID:12)

× So when I buy a gift for them and hang it for them, they will satisfy with it.

✓ So when I buy a gift for them and give it to them, they will be satisfied with it.

Wrong verb 'hang' — context requires 'give'; 'they will satisfy with it' uses wrong form; correct passive/adjective is 'be satisfied with it.' Also 'will' is acceptable for general result here. (ID:8)

× Umm, I used to give like my friends, one of my handmade gift, uh, when I was like 15 years old, I used to met a umm, I would say that it's kind a umm, book diary that I bought it from the bookstore and I just decorate a little bit.

✓ I used to give my friends handmade gifts. When I was about 15 years old, I once made a kind of book diary: I bought it from a bookstore and decorated it a little.

Multiple errors: 'used to met' incorrect — 'met' is past tense of meet, not needed here. Simplified to clear past habitual action with 'used to give'. 'one of my handmade gift' should be 'handmade gifts' or 'a handmade gift'. 'it's kind a' should be 'a kind of'. Remove redundant 'it' after 'bought'. Use past tense consistently for a past event. (ID:8)

× It's depend on the people.

✓ It depends on the person.

Verb must agree with subject: use third-person singular 'depends' not 'depend'. Also 'the people' sounds general; 'the person' or 'people' with plural verb could be used — chosen singular 'the person' for clarity. (ID:4)

× Some people prioritize expensive, umm, that Oh, you are uh, really be a good friends that because you bored me a expensive gift.

✓ Some people prioritize expensive gifts because they think you are a good friend if you give them an expensive present.

Awkward and incorrect adjective/noun use: 'prioritize expensive' needs 'gifts'. 'really be a good friends' mixes modal/verb and number; correct is 'think you are a good friend.' 'bored me a expensive gift' is nonsense and ungrammatical; replaced with clear explanation. (ID:13)

× But some people, they don't think about that. They just like want you to attends their special occasion or special event and even like.

✓ But some people don't think that way. They just want you to attend their special occasions or events.

Redundant pronoun 'they' after 'some people' is acceptable colloquially but removed for clarity. 'want you to attends' should be 'want you to attend' (infinitive). 'occasion' should be plural to match general meaning. Removed trailing 'and even like' which is unfinished. (ID:12)