Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting reasons or an example. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. For example, start with “Not really” or “Yes, I am” and follow with why. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and connect ideas with linking words such as “because” or “so”.

例: Not really. I find choosing gifts difficult because I worry they won’t suit the person’s taste. So I usually ask friends for suggestions to make sure the gift is appropriate.

提案: Answer directly naming the occasions, then give a brief detail or example. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear words. Keep sentences short and linked with words like “usually” or “mainly”. Correct any wrong or inappropriate words.

例: I usually give gifts on birthdays and at weddings. For example, I might buy clothes for a friend’s birthday or a household item for a wedding.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence explaining the main consideration (e.g., the recipient’s preferences), then add a brief reason or an example. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct phrasing (“I ask for recommendations”). Avoid repeating words.

例: I mainly consider the recipient’s preferences because a gift should match their taste. Therefore, I often ask a close friend or family member for recommendations before buying something.

提案: This answer is good but can be made more natural and concise. Start with a clear statement, then give one specific detail about the handmade gift and why you made it. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “I made it myself”).

例: Yes, I have. For my friend’s birthday I made a handmade greeting card with a photo and a handwritten message because I wanted the gift to feel personal.

提案: Give a clear opinion first (Yes/No), then explain briefly with a reason and an example. Use linking words like “because” and avoid redundant phrases. Be careful with pronouns and phrasing (use “their” instead of “his/her”).

例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better because what matters is how well the gift suits the recipient. For example, a small, thoughtful present that matches someone’s hobby can be more meaningful than an expensive item.

× Ever I have to give a gift to someone.

✓ I often have to give gifts to people.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and choice of adverb. 'Ever' is not used to mean 'often'. Use the adverb 'often' and place it before the main verb. Also use plural 'gifts' and plural 'people' to sound natural.

× I think it'll work a lot.

✓ I think it works well.

The phrase 'it'll work a lot' is awkward and unclear. Use 'it works well' to convey that the practice is effective. Match tense and use a clear adverb 'well' instead of 'a lot' for this context.

× Because I think I'm not.

✓ Because I think I'm not good at it.

The sentence is a fragment and lacks an object and complement. Add 'good at it' to complete the idea and clarify what 'not' refers to.

× Choosing things according to the person.

✓ Choosing things based on the person.

'According to the person' is awkward here; use 'based on' or 'according to the person's preferences'. Also add a subject to make a complete sentence: 'I choose things based on the person.'

× Give gifts like pants and guns as his birthday and his wedding.

✓ I give gifts like pants and gloves for his birthday and his wedding.

Original has wrong verb form and awkward items; 'Give gifts' should be 'I give gifts'. 'Guns' is likely a mistranslation; 'gloves' or another item fits better. Use 'for' to indicate occasions. Ensure plural agreement and correct vocabulary.

× I don't give like for another case.

✓ I don't give gifts for other occasions.

The phrase 'give like for another case' is ungrammatical. Use 'gifts' and 'other occasions' to express the intended meaning; place verbs correctly: 'I don't give gifts for other occasions.'

× That's very difficult question for me because like I already said, I'm not good in choosing gifts so I always take recommend recommendations for someone who is good in it.

✓ That's a very difficult question for me because, as I already said, I'm not good at choosing gifts, so I always ask someone who is good at it for recommendations.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'very difficult question'; 'like' is filler and unnecessary; preposition 'in' should be 'at' after 'good'; 'take recommend recommendations' is incorrect—use 'ask someone for recommendations' or 'take recommendations from someone'. Also add commas and fix word order for clarity.

× Yes I did once like my friend had his birthday so I gave him a greeting card which I made in my myself.

✓ Yes, I did. Once my friend had his birthday, so I gave him a greeting card that I made myself.

Add punctuation and natural connectors. Use 'that' for the relative clause and remove redundant 'in my myself'; use 'made myself' to indicate handmade. Also reorder 'once' to improve flow.

× Uh, no, I'm going to say expensive gifts are not better for someone's feeling.

✓ No, I would say expensive gifts do not better express someone's feelings.

'I'm going to say' is awkward—'I would say' is more natural. 'Are not better for someone's feeling' is ungrammatical; use 'do not better express someone's feelings' or 'do not express feelings better'. Use plural 'feelings'.

× Uh, it should be according to their need or it should be according to his preference.

✓ It should depend on their needs or their preferences.

Mixing singular 'his' with plural 'their' is inconsistent. Use plural 'their' for gender-neutral reference and plural 'needs/preferences'. Replace 'according to' with 'depend on' for natural phrasing.

× So I'm going to say expensive or not.

✓ So I'm going to say it doesn't matter whether the gift is expensive or not.

Original is a fragment and unclear. Expand to a full clause: 'it doesn't matter whether the gift is expensive or not' to clearly express the intended meaning.