Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition ("really" used often) and tense mistakes (use past tense for past events). Use precise vocabulary like "enjoy giving gifts" and "personal".

例: Yes, I enjoy giving thoughtful presents. For example, when my best friend's birthday came last year, I made a photo album containing pictures from the last ten years, and she loved it.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles) and unclear phrases ("mechanism really delightful," "meaning of celebrity"). Be specific about occasions and give one example. Keep to max 4–5 sentences.

例: I usually give gifts on people's birthdays and at festivals. For instance, I give small presents to children during Lunar New Year because it’s a traditional time for celebrating, and receiving a meaningful gift makes people feel happy.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating factors you consider. Avoid filler sounds ("uh") and incorrect collocations ("tendency of receiver", "receiver would allow"). Use linking words to list factors and give a brief example to illustrate. Use words like "preferences, practicality, price, and design."

例: I consider the recipient's preferences and the gift's practicality. For example, if they like cooking I might buy a high-quality cookbook with attractive design, but if they prefer experiences I would give a cooking class voucher.

提案: Keep answer concise and correct grammar ("I often give my friends handmade gifts", "she was really touched", "when I was in primary school"). Use a topic sentence, then one specific example with past tense and a brief effect. Avoid unnecessary extra examples unless brief and relevant.

例: Yes, I often give handmade gifts because I enjoy making personal presents. For example, last year I painted a portrait for my best friend's birthday and she was really touched.

提案: State your opinion clearly in one sentence, then support it with reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and vocabulary ("depend on price", "handmade gifts", "practicality and preferences"). Provide a brief example to illustrate why price isn't the main factor.

例: No, I don't think price matters when expressing feelings. Handmade gifts can be more meaningful because they show time and effort; for example, a homemade photo album from a close friend felt more special to me than an expensive item.

× Yes, I think I'm really good at giving gifts and I'm really enjoying and making gifts and I like choosing things that have personal meaning.

✓ Yes, I think I'm really good at giving gifts; I really enjoy making them and I like choosing things that have personal meaning.

The original mixes tenses and awkward continuous form 'I'm really enjoying and making gifts'. Use simple present 'I really enjoy making them' for habitual preferences. Also combine clauses clearly and replace 'gifts' with 'them' to avoid repetition.

× For example, when my best friend's birthday approach, I created a photo album with our picture from the last 10 years, which she really loved.

✓ For example, when my best friend's birthday approached, I created a photo album with our pictures from the last 10 years, which she really loved.

The time clause refers to a past event so use past tense 'approached' (not present 'approach'). Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'the last 10 years.' This fixes tense consistency and noun number.

× I always give gifts on their birthday and I think when somebody's birthday coming up and received some meaningful gifts, will mechanism really delightful and I always give kids on a festival for the meaning of celebrity and I think it would make all of us very happy.

✓ I always give gifts on people's birthdays, and I think when somebody's birthday is coming up and they receive a meaningful gift, it makes them really happy. I also always give children gifts on festivals because of the celebratory meaning, and I think it makes everyone happy.

Multiple problems: missing auxiliary in 'is coming up' (present continuous), wrong verb form 'received' should be 'they receive' to match clause, incorrect phrase 'will mechanism really delightful' is ungrammatical — replace with 'it makes them really happy.' 'kids' should be 'children' and 'for the meaning of celebrity' is incorrect; use 'because of the celebratory meaning.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense.

× The main reason I choosing a gift, it would be a tendency of receiver.

✓ The main reason I choose a gift is the recipient's preferences.

Use simple present 'I choose' instead of incorrect '-ing' form 'I choosing.' The clause should be structured with 'is' to link subject and complement. 'Tendency of receiver' is awkward; use 'recipient's preferences.'

× Uh, I think it's pretty matter that, uh, receiver would allow that gift.

✓ Uh, I think it matters that the recipient will accept the gift.

The phrase 'pretty matter' is incorrect; use 'it matters.' 'Receiver' should be 'recipient.' Use 'will accept' or 'accept' depending on nuance; here 'will accept' fits future expectation. Correct verb choice and word order.

× And I also would consider about, uh, valuable and, uh, design, uh.

✓ And I would also consider the value and the design.

Do not use 'consider about'; 'consider' takes a direct object. Use nouns 'value' and 'design' rather than adjective 'valuable.' Place articles correctly: 'the value and the design.'

× Yes, I often give my friends handmade gift because I enjoy creating something personal for them.

✓ Yes, I often give my friends handmade gifts because I enjoy creating something personal for them.

'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to agree with 'my friends' and habitual action. The rest is fine; keep simple present for habitual actions.

× For example, I paint a portrait for my best friend last year to celebrate her birthday and she was really touch.

✓ For example, I painted a portrait for my best friend last year to celebrate her birthday, and she was really touched.

Use past tense 'painted' for a past action. 'Was really touch' is incorrect adjective form; use past participle/adjective 'touched.' Ensure tense consistency.

× And when I was primary school I also give my classmates A handmade perfume.

✓ And when I was in primary school I also gave my classmates a handmade perfume.

Use past tense 'gave' to match 'was in primary school.' Include preposition 'in primary school.' 'A' should be lowercase 'a' and 'handmade perfume' is acceptable as singular if giving the same item to multiple classmates is assumed, but 'gave my classmates handmade perfumes' may be clearer if each received one.

× No I don't think gifts which depends on price.

✓ No, I don't think gifts should depend on price.

Original is a sentence fragment. Use modal 'should' to express opinion and correct verb agreement 'depend' rather than 'depends' (subject 'gifts' plural). Add commas for clarity.

× I would say the hands make gifts are meaningful and really touched me when I received a handmade gift and I also mainly consider the practical and the preference of.

✓ I would say handmade gifts are meaningful and really touched me when I received them, and I mainly consider practicality and the recipient's preferences.

'Hands make gifts' is ungrammatical; use 'handmade gifts.' 'Really touched me' is fine but refer back with 'them.' 'Consider the practical and the preference of' is incorrect — use 'consider practicality and the recipient's preferences.' Rearranged to clear sentence structure and correct noun forms.