Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct collocations (e.g., "recipients' preferences" not "references") and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts because I tailor presents to each person's preferences. For example, I consider the recipient's interests and practical needs, then choose an appropriate item; I also wrap it neatly to make the gift feel special.

提案: Keep sentences natural and fix small language errors. Use linking words to connect statements and be specific about the reaction. Avoid repeating numbers unnecessarily and use correct phrase forms (e.g., "the books' content" or simply "the books").

例: I usually give gifts for special occasions such as birthdays, graduations and promotions. For instance, last month I bought books for two friends graduating from medical school, and when they said they enjoyed them I felt very proud of my choice.

提案: Use accurate vocabulary and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a concise, coherent example. Replace unclear words (e.g., "receivers references" -> "recipient's preferences") and avoid awkward phrases like "appreciated the toughness."

例: I consider the recipient's preferences and practical needs when choosing a gift. For example, knowing two friends were medical students who enjoy reading, I bought medical textbooks that helped them with coursework and they appreciated the thoughtful choice.

提案: Be precise and natural in description. Use correct compound nouns and phrases (e.g., "handmade paper flowers in a glass vase" instead of "made-up handmade vessel flowers"). Keep it to two or three sentences and link reason to effect clearly.

例: Yes, I have. I decorated a glass vase with handcrafted paper flowers and small beads for a friend. I prefer handmade gifts because they feel personal and show that I invested time and effort into something meaningful.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct vocabulary mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give concise reasons with appropriate vocabulary (avoid odd words like "tofu"). Explain why personal or thoughtful gifts matter more and provide a brief example.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because price alone rarely shows thoughtfulness; a personal or handmade gift often conveys genuine emotions. For example, a heartfelt letter or a custom photo album means more to me than an expensive gadget.

× Giving gifts Yes, I think I'm really good at giving gifts because my friends and family usually love the gifts I give them.

✓ Yes, I think I'm really good at giving gifts because my friends and family usually love the gifts I give them.

The original begins with an unnecessary fragment 'Giving gifts' which is not grammatically connected to the sentence; this is a sentence structure error but falls under 'Verb + -ing form' as the gerund is misused. Remove the fragment so the sentence starts properly. Suggestion: start sentences without dangling gerunds unless they function correctly as subjects or are connected with punctuation.

× For example, I take into account two things, the recipients references and then needs to choose the most suitable items.

✓ For example, I take into account two things: the recipient's preferences and their needs to choose the most suitable items.

Problems: incorrect plural/singular and possessive form 'recipients references' should be 'recipient's preferences' (possessive) and 'preferences' better than 'references'; 'then needs' is incorrect use of pronoun and verb. Use 'their needs' or 'the recipient's needs'. Also use a colon for listing.

× In addition, I also wrap the gifts nicely to make it look special outside and keep the content secret.

✓ In addition, I also wrap the gifts nicely to make them look special on the outside and keep the contents secret.

Errors: pronoun/number agreement 'make it look' should match plural 'gifts' so 'make them look'; 'outside' as noun needs preposition 'on the outside'; 'content' when referring to multiple gifts should be plural 'contents'.

× I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays, graduations and promotions.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays, graduations, and promotions.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but a comma before 'and' (serial/Oxford comma) clarifies the list. No change in number needed.

× For example, last month I bought 2 books for two friends to celebrate their graduation from medical school.

✓ For example, last month I bought two books for two friends to celebrate their graduations from medical school.

When each friend has completed their own graduation, use the plural 'graduations' or rephrase to 'to celebrate their graduation' is also acceptable. Also use words for numbers in formal text ('two').

× After that, they told me they really liked the books contains, so I felt very proud of my choice.

✓ After that, they told me they really liked the books' contents, so I felt very proud of my choice.

Error: 'books contains' is incorrect form. Use the possessive 'books' contents' or better 'the contents of the books'. The definite article 'the' before 'books' is fine; correct noun form is 'contents'.

× I usually consider two things, the receivers references and their practical needs.

✓ I usually consider two things: the receiver's preferences and their practical needs.

'receivers references' should be possessive 'receiver's' and 'preferences' is more appropriate than 'references'. Use a colon for clarity. 'Their practical needs' aligns pronoun number; alternatively 'the receiver's practical needs'. Applies to pronoun and possessive errors.

× For example, I bought 2 medical books to friends because I knew exactly they enjoyed reading and especially they were studying medicine.

✓ For example, I bought two medical books for friends because I knew they enjoyed reading and were studying medicine.

Problems: use 'for friends' not 'to friends'; remove 'exactly' which is awkward here; pronoun placement: 'I knew they enjoyed reading and were studying medicine.' Avoid repeating 'they'. Use words for numbers.

× As a result, they found the books very helpful for their coursework and appreciated the toughness.

✓ As a result, they found the books very helpful for their coursework and appreciated the thoughtfulness.

'appreciated the toughness' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'thoughtfulness'. Use correct adjective-derived noun. 'Toughness' means durability and doesn't fit context.

× Yes I have. I made-up handmade vessel flowers for a friend by decorating a glass face with handcrafted paper flowers and small beads.

✓ Yes, I have. I made handmade vase flowers for a friend by decorating a glass vase with handcrafted paper flowers and small beads.

Errors: 'made-up' suggests inventing a story; use 'made' for creating an object. 'handmade vessel flowers' is awkward and likely 'handmade vase flowers' or 'flowers in a vase'; 'glass face' is incorrect—should be 'glass vase'. Also add commas after introductory 'Yes, I have.'

× I like giving handmade gifts because they feel more personal and show the recipient that I put time and effort into choosing something meaningful.

✓ I like giving handmade gifts because they feel more personal and show the recipient that I put time and effort into making something meaningful.

Mixing 'choosing' with 'handmade' is slightly inconsistent. Better verb is 'making' since the gifts are handmade. Otherwise sentence is fine; this targets verb choice/pronoun consistency.

× No, I don't think expensive gifts better express my feelings because they might make impression initially but don't have much meaning, whereas tofu and personal gifts can convey genuine emotions which will strengthen our relationship more deeply.

✓ No, I don't think expensive gifts better express my feelings because they might make an impression initially but don't have much meaning, whereas thoughtful and personal gifts can convey genuine emotions that will strengthen our relationship more deeply.

Errors: missing article 'an' before 'impression'; 'tofu' is incorrect word choice—should be 'thoughtful'; comparative structure 'better express' is acceptable but overall wording improved. Replace 'which' with 'that' for restrictive clause. Fix word choice and articles.