Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 전반적으로 적절하지만 발음 실수와 중복 표현이 점수를 낮춥니다. 문장을 더 간결하게 만들고 중복되는 단어를 제거하세요. 또한 시제와 단수·복수 형태를 확인하고, 자연스러운 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 구체적으로는 ‘I spend a lot of time thinking about what the recipient needs’처럼 표현을 정리하고, ‘This attention to detail helps me choose meaningful and useful gifts’로 마무리하세요.

例: Yes, I am. I usually spend a lot of time thinking about what the recipient needs, and this attention to detail helps me choose meaningful and useful gifts.

提案: 의미는 잘 전달되지만 중복 발음(‘On on’)과 단어 형태 오류(‘appreciations’ → ‘appreciation’)가 있습니다. 문장을 하나로 깔끔하게 정리하고 연결어로 이유를 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 예: ‘On special occasions such as birthdays or graduations, because they are good times to celebrate and show appreciation.’

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or graduations, because they are good opportunities to celebrate and show my appreciation.

提案: 문법과 유창성에서 개선 필요가 있습니다. ‘receivers’는 소유격 형태로 ‘the recipient’s taste’가 맞고, 중복된 표현(‘I want to I want to’)을 제거하세요. 연결어 ‘but’ 사용은 좋으므로 이를 유지하되 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 예: ‘I consider the recipient's taste and my budget, because I want them to like the gift without spending too much.’

例: I consider the recipient's taste and my budget, because I want them to like the gift while avoiding overspending.

提案: 문법 오류(시제·동명사 사용)와 단어 선택 문제가 있습니다. ‘written handwritten letters’는 중복이고 ‘knitting a scarf’ 대신 ‘knitted a scarf’가 자연스럽습니다. 또한 ‘touchy’는 부적절한 단어로 ‘touching’이나 ‘more personal’로 바꾸세요. 문장을 간단히 정리하세요.

例: Yes. I have written handwritten letters and knitted a scarf, because handmade gifts feel more personal and touching than store-bought ones.

提案: 의견은 명확하지만 표현과 문장 연결이 어색합니다. ‘as the same goes’는 자연스럽지 않고 ‘because’로 시작한 문장은 앞 문장과 더 매끄럽게 연결되어야 합니다. ‘touchy’ 대신 ‘touched’ 또는 ‘moved’를 사용하세요. 예: ‘Not really. I believe it's the thought that counts; for example, a handmade photo album I gave to a friend moved her more than an expensive gadget would have.’

例: Not really. I believe it's the thought that counts; for example, a handmade photo album I gave to a close friend moved her more than an expensive gadget would have.

× I think I'm pretty good at it because I spend a lot of time about a lot of time thinking about what what the recipient actually need.

✓ I think I'm pretty good at it because I spend a lot of time thinking about what the recipient actually needs.

The sentence had duplication ('about a lot of time about a lot of time' and 'what what') and a subject-verb agreement error: 'recipient' is singular and requires the third person singular verb 'needs'. Remove the repeated words and use 'needs' for correct agreement. Suggestion: proofread to remove repetitions and ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.

× On on special occasions like birthdays or graduations, it's the best way to celebrate and show my appreciations to people I love.

✓ On special occasions like birthdays or graduations, it's the best way to celebrate and show my appreciation to people I love.

There is a duplicated word ('On on') and 'appreciations' is incorrectly plural in this context; the uncountable noun 'appreciation' is correct. Remove duplicate 'On' and use 'appreciation'. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns like 'appreciation' when referring to a general feeling.

× I always consider the receivers taste and my budget.

✓ I always consider the receiver's taste and my budget.

Possessive form is missing: 'receivers' should be the possessive 'receiver's' to indicate that the taste belongs to the receiver. Also consider using 'recipients' as a plural noun if referring to multiple people. Suggestion: add apostrophe for singular possessive or change to plural possessive 'recipients' with 'tastes' if appropriate.

× I want to I want to them to like it, but I also have to be careful not to overspend.

✓ I want them to like it, but I also have to be careful not to overspend.

The phrase contains an unnecessary repetition ('I want to I want to') and an incorrect word order ('to them to like it'). The correct structure is 'I want them to like it.' Remove repetition and place the object 'them' before the infinitive 'to like'. Suggestion: say the sentence aloud to check for accidental repeats and ensure proper object placement.

× Of course I have written handwritten letters or knitting A scarf because handmade gifts feel more touchy than store bought ones.

✓ Of course I have written handwritten letters or knitted a scarf because handmade gifts feel more touching than store-bought ones.

Mixed verb forms: 'have written' (present perfect) is fine for letters, but 'knitting A scarf' should be the past participle 'knitted' to parallel 'have written'. 'Touchy' is incorrect in this context; 'touching' (meaning emotionally moving) is appropriate. 'store bought' should be hyphenated as 'store-bought'. Suggestion: use parallel verb forms after 'have' and choose the adjective 'touching' for emotional description.

× Not really, as the same goes. It's the thought that counts, not the price tag. Because I gave a handmade photo album to a close friend and she was much more touchy than when I bought an expensive gadget.

✓ Not really, the same goes. It's the thought that counts, not the price tag. For example, I gave a handmade photo album to a close friend and she was much more touched than when I bought an expensive gadget.

Phrasing issues: 'as the same goes' is incorrect; 'the same goes' is preferable. Starting a sentence with 'Because' followed by an independent clause creates a fragment; use 'For example' or combine clauses. 'Touchy' is incorrect; 'touched' (past participle expressing emotional response) is correct. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by connecting clauses properly and use 'touched' to describe emotional reaction.