Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + short reason), reduce hesitation and filler words, and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "lively" → "thoughtful" or "live plants").

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts because I try to choose thoughtful items. For example, I often give live plants or fresh flowers, which feel personal and brighten the recipient's home.

提案: Answer directly with clear examples and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to list occasions and be specific about recipients. Correct grammar for "to them" and say "special occasions such as birthdays and festivals".

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays and holidays. For instance, I buy presents for my husband and my mother on their birthdays and during Lunar New Year.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and expand with a specific example linked by "for example". Use correct vocabulary ("clothes" not "clone") and add a brief reason why those suit him.

例: I consider the recipient's interests and needs when choosing a gift. For example, for my husband I usually buy clothes and books because he likes reading and needs smart-casual shirts for work.

提案: Respond directly (No or Yes + reason), avoid repetition and fillers, and give a short explanation with linking word like "because". Use correct phrasing ("my handmade skills are not good").

例: No, I haven't given handmade gifts because my crafting skills are limited. Therefore, I prefer to buy carefully chosen items that suit each person's taste.

提案: Give a balanced opinion with a clear opening ("It depends") and support it with two brief reasons using linking words ("On one hand... On the other hand..."). Use concise vocabulary like "show appreciation" instead of awkward phrasing.

例: It depends. On one hand, expensive gifts can show appreciation because they often have higher perceived value. On the other hand, a thoughtful, inexpensive gift can be more meaningful if it matches the recipient's tastes.

× I prefer to give gifts of umm, some lively thing, items such as flower.

✓ I prefer to give lively items, such as flowers.

The student used 'some lively thing, items such as flower' which mixes singular/plural and awkward quantifiers. Use 'items' with plural 'flowers' and place adjective before noun: 'lively items, such as flowers.' This fixes quantifier and singular/plural issues and improves word order.

× It's uh, actually it's best from other gifts.

✓ Actually, it's the best of all gifts.

The original sentence misuses articles and prepositions ('best from other gifts'). Use the definite article with superlative 'the best' and correct preposition 'of all' to compare with other gifts.

× I usually give gifts to the special occasions such as birthday and some celebrity, uh, activities.

✓ I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and other celebrations.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'occasions' not 'to'. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' in general statements and 'celebrity activities' is unclear; 'other celebrations' is more natural.

× Umm, I usually gift to my husband and my mother to their.

✓ I usually give gifts to my husband and my mother on those occasions.

The verb 'gift' is uncommon in this transitive form; 'give gifts to' is natural. The original ends with 'to their' which is incorrect; use 'on those occasions' or 'then' to indicate timing.

× I consider when I choose a gift related on person's interests.

✓ I consider a person's interests when I choose a gift.

Use 'consider' with the object before the adverbial clause; the preposition 'related on' is incorrect — use 'related to' or rephrase to 'consider a person's interests'.

× For example, when I choose a gift for my husband, I usually purchase clone and books.

✓ For example, when I choose a gift for my husband, I usually buy clothes and books.

'Clone' is a misspelling of 'clothes'. Use 'buy' instead of 'purchase' for natural speech; 'clothes' must be plural. This fixes word choice and singular/plural errors.

× Uh, I think I didn't have I ever given others handmade gift because, uh, actually my, uh, ability handmade abilities not good.

✓ I don't think I have ever given anyone a handmade gift because my crafting abilities are not good.

The original mixes past and perfect forms incorrectly ('didn't have I ever given'). Use present perfect 'have ever given' for life experience. 'Others' should be 'anyone' and 'handmade gift' needs an article 'a'. 'Ability handmade abilities not good' is ungrammatical; use 'my crafting abilities are not good.'

× That's why I prefer to buy something special, uh, gifts to the people.

✓ That's why I prefer to buy special gifts for people.

The phrase 'buy something special, gifts to the people' mixes singular and plural and wrong preposition. Use plural 'gifts' and preposition 'for people' or 'for them'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

Question word order is incorrect; move 'better' after the verb phrase 'express your feelings' to form a natural comparative question.

× Uh, it depends on the people interests.

✓ It depends on the people's interests.

Use the possessive 'people's interests' rather than 'the people interests.' This corrects adjective/noun relationship.

× Some people, uh, want to take, umm, expensive gift, uh, which it's, uh, more valuable things to that's people and uh, some of that, not that.

✓ Some people prefer to receive expensive gifts because they consider them more valuable, while others do not.

The original has multiple issues: 'want to take' is unnatural for gifts — use 'prefer to receive.' 'Expensive gift' needs plural or 'an expensive gift.' 'Which it's more valuable things to that's people' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'because they consider them more valuable.' End contrast with 'while others do not.' This fixes verb choice, pronoun reference, and sentence structure.