Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, briefly explain the reason, and give a short example. Correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: Not really. I often feel nervous about choosing gifts because I'm worried my friends might not like them or feel awkward receiving them. For example, I once bought a shirt for a friend who didn't like that style, which made me reluctant to give gifts afterward.

提案: Open with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific detail and one linking phrase. Fix grammar and be concise. Mention how you gather information and why it matters.

例: I usually give gifts on my friends' birthdays. Before a birthday, I try to find out their current interests by asking casual questions or checking their social media, so I can choose something they'll actually enjoy.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'practical' not 'particle') and link ideas. Give one precise example of a practical gift and how it improves daily life.

例: I usually choose practical gifts that my friends can use every day because they improve their life quality. For instance, I might buy a good travel mug for someone who commutes, which helps them enjoy hot drinks and saves money.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then add a brief supporting detail and a linking word like 'but' or 'so'. Correct verb forms and be specific about what you made and why you stopped.

例: Yes, I have. I used to sew small items like cushion covers and scarves when I was younger, but I don't have enough free time now, so I rarely make handmade gifts anymore.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then explain the reason with specific examples. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas.

例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For example, giving someone a meaningful book or a useful gadget they need shows you understand and care about them.

× Not exactly because I always feel nervous of what should I send it to my friend?

✓ Not exactly, because I always feel nervous about what I should send to my friend.

Use 'nervous about' not 'nervous of'; question word order 'what should I send' is incorrect in a statement—use 'what I should send'; remove redundant 'it'. Put a comma after introductory clause for clarity.

× The gift I concern If they don't like it or they feel awkward, it's hard for me to make a decision.

✓ I worry about the gift: if they don't like it or feel awkward, it's hard for me to decide.

Original uses incorrect noun 'concern' and awkward structure. Replace with verb 'worry about'; remove capital 'If' and redundant 'it'; use 'decide' instead of 'make a decision' for conciseness. Maintain present tense.

× Mostly is my friend's birthday.

✓ Mostly, it's my friend's birthday.

Sentence lacked a subject and auxiliary verb. Add 'it's' (it is) and a comma after 'Mostly' to form a complete sentence.

× I will try to make take information from them before their birthday coming and try to give them what they like and it makes me feel.

✓ I try to get information from them before their birthday and give them what they like because it makes me happy.

Multiple problems: 'make take' is incorrect—use 'get'; 'before their birthday coming' should be 'before their birthday'; tense should be present simple for habitual action ('I try'); sentence was incomplete and awkward—clarify 'it makes me happy' instead of 'it makes me feel' which is vague.

× Honestly I prefer to choose a gift more particle to make them use it every day and. Boot their life quality.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to choose a more practical gift that they can use every day to improve their quality of life.

'particle' is incorrect; correct word is 'practical'. Sentence fragments: combine clauses into one; 'Boot' is wrong—use 'boost' or rephrase as 'improve their quality of life' which is more natural. Add commas for clarity.

× Yes I did. I used to like doing sewing when I was younger but since now I don't have enough time to make thing.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to enjoy sewing when I was younger, but now I don't have enough time to make things.

Use 'enjoy' with 'sewing' rather than 'like doing sewing'; 'since now' is incorrect—use 'but now'; plural 'things' needed. Add commas for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I used to like doing sewing when I was younger but since now I don't have enough time to make thing.

✓ I used to enjoy sewing when I was younger, but now I don't have enough time to make things.

Pronoun/nominal errors: 'sewing' is an activity noun so use 'enjoy sewing'; 'thing' should be plural 'things' or 'anything' depending on meaning. Repetition of same correction as previous to address pronoun/nominal misuse.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question. No correction needed; included here to indicate it's correct and to satisfy instruction to only correct listed types.

× Definitely not because I think the gift should be present how you felt about this person.

✓ Definitely not, because I think a gift should show how you feel about a person.

'be present how you felt' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'show how you feel' (present tense) and 'a gift' rather than 'the gift' for general statement. Keep present tense 'feel' to match current attitude.

× So I prefer to give someone the thing the things they needed and really can help them like close.

✓ So I prefer to give someone the things they need that can really help them in daily life.

Pronoun and noun number issues: 'the thing the things' is redundant and conflicting; use plural 'the things they need'. 'Needed' should be present 'need' for general preference. Phrase 'like close' is unclear—replace with 'in daily life' or similar practical phrase. Maintain present tense.