Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'mandatory gift' không phù hợp), dùng từ chính xác (practical, useful), chỉnh lại đại từ và cấu trúc câu. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp rồi đưa 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể và một lý do ngắn. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: I think I am fairly good at choosing gifts. I usually pick practical gifts, such as stationery or kitchen items, because my friends and students often appreciate things they can use every day. For example, I once gave a classmate a durable water bottle that she used throughout the year, which she really liked.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng về thời điểm (birthdays, weddings, festivals) và tránh nói lặp. Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý (for example, especially, because). Tránh từ sai (e.g., 'to birth') và nêu 1 ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ 2-4 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như 'special occasions', 'weddings', 'birthdays', 'cash gifts', 'sentimental gifts'.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays and weddings. For example, at birthdays I often give a small sentimental present, while at weddings I may give a practical or monetary gift. I prefer to match the gift to the occasion and the recipient's needs.

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng các tiêu chí lựa chọn (sở thích người nhận, mục đích, ngân sách). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không đúng nghĩa ('head tumors', 'discourse' sai ngữ cảnh). Sử dụng cụm từ như 'their preferences', 'usefulness', 'budget' và đưa ví dụ minh họa rõ ràng. Duy trì câu ngắn, mạch lạc.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's preferences, the gift's usefulness, and my budget. For example, if a friend likes art, I might buy a sketchbook, but if someone prefers practical items I would choose a useful gadget. I always try to pick something that fits their taste.

提案: Cần nói rõ hoạt động của bạn (bán đồ handmade) với cấu trúc chính xác, nêu ví dụ cụ thể về vật phẩm bạn làm và lý do người nhận thích đồ handmade. Tránh lỗi từ vựng ('enhancements', 'brothers', 'monetary' sai ngữ cảnh). Dùng từ như 'handmade jewellery', 'charms', 'necklaces', 'bracelets'.

例: Yes, I often make handmade gifts because I sell handmade jewellery. For example, I make bracelets and necklaces with small charms like fish or trees. Handmade gifts are meaningful and personal, so many people appreciate them more than store-bought items.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ quan điểm (có/không) ngay từ đầu, giải thích lý do ngắn gọn và đưa ví dụ. Tránh cấu trúc rườm rà và lỗi ngữ pháp ('maximum my own emotion' không đúng). Dùng từ như 'expensive', 'handmade', 'more meaningful', 'personal touch'. Giữ 2-3 câu rõ ràng.

例: I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. A handmade or thoughtful present often shows personal effort and meaning, which can be more touching. For instance, a simple handmade card can be more memorable than an expensive item.

× Well, I think it will depend on people.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the person.

The student used future 'will depend' where a general present-tense statement is appropriate. Use simple present 'depends' for habitual or general truths and change 'people' to 'the person' or 'people in general' for clarity.

× I would give them a gift and I usually give them a mandatory gift because it is so practical especially for worker or students.

✓ I would give them a gift and I usually give a practical, necessary gift because it is useful, especially for workers or students.

Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'worker' should be plural 'workers'. 'Mandatory gift' is awkward; 'practical, necessary gift' fits meaning. Use consistent plural 'workers or students' and adjust article placement.

× They don't have enough money to maintain our the daily life.

✓ They don't have enough money to cover their daily living expenses.

Incorrect prepositions and possessive pronoun: 'our the daily life' is wrong. Use 'their' for third-person plural and 'cover ... expenses' is the natural collocation.

× So I want to bring them.

✓ So I want to help them.

'Bring them' is an incorrect verb choice and unclear. 'Help them' conveys intended meaning; restructure sentence to fit context.

× Uh, I usually give, give on special occasions such as our birthday or a wedding to birth, especially on the birthday, because there even are, uh, traditional time, uh, whose people won't give give.

✓ I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or weddings, especially birthdays, although there are traditional times when people do not give gifts.

Use simple present 'usually give' for habitual actions. Fix pluralization 'birthday'->'birthdays', 'a wedding to birth' is incorrect. Clarify 'there are traditional times when people do not give gifts'.

× And I think monetary gift or a sentimental gift are, are suit.

✓ And I think a monetary gift or a sentimental gift is suitable.

Subject-verb agreement and adjective choice: use singular or plural consistently. 'are, are suit' incorrect; use 'is suitable' for 'a monetary gift or a sentimental gift'.

× Well, I would say there's are easily conduc considered about monetary gift or sentimental gift as As for example, when my friends have a birthday, I usually, umm, give her a sentimental gift, but it's, uh, her head tumors.

✓ I would say it is easy to consider whether to give a monetary or sentimental gift. For example, when my friend has a birthday, I usually give her a sentimental gift, but sometimes she does not want to receive it.

Multiple structural problems and unclear phrases: 'there's are easily conduc' is meaningless. 'friends' should be singular 'friend' when referring to 'her'. 'her head tumors' is incorrect and likely mispronounced; replace with 'she does not want to receive it'.

× And I think it's, it's so discourse.

✓ And I think it's very disappointing.

Word choice error: 'discourse' is incorrect; 'disappointing' expresses the intended emotion.

× Well, I would say that I am a seller of hands made gift and I usually create enhancements give us such as or brothers or rings by my hand with a charm like fish or tree.

✓ I would say that I sell handmade gifts and I usually make accessories such as brooches or rings by hand with charms like fish or trees.

Tense and noun form corrections: 'hands made' -> 'handmade', 'seller of' -> 'sell', 'enhancements give us' unclear; 'accessories' fits. 'brothers' -> 'brooches' or 'brooches' corrected to 'brooches'. Use plural 'trees' for consistency.

× And I think it's were suitable for people who want to receive monetary.

✓ And I think they are suitable for people who prefer monetary gifts.

Quantifier and agreement: 'it's were' is wrong; use 'they are' referring to the gifts. 'receive monetary' is incomplete; use 'prefer monetary gifts'.

× Umm, I don't think so because, uh, something like hands-made gifts, they don't too much expenses, but I, uh, usually maximum my own emotion and I want, umm, people who receive this gift can, uh, understand our might feel and I think, umm.

✓ I don't think so because handmade gifts are not very expensive, but they express my emotions most fully, and I want people who receive the gift to understand how I feel.

Word order and adjective/adverb use: 'hands-made' -> 'handmade'; 'they don't too much expenses' -> 'are not very expensive'; 'maximum my own emotion' -> 'express my emotions most fully'; fix pronouns 'our might feel' -> 'how I feel' and overall sentence flow.