History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and coherent by avoiding short, fragmented sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about what you like about studying history. For example, explain what lessons you learn and how you apply them.

例: Yes, I have studied history both in high school and university. Whenever I want to learn more, I usually grab some books and study at home. I really enjoy it because it helps me understand past events and learn valuable lessons that I can apply in my life.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity by using complete sentences and linking words. Be more specific about how visiting historic sites helps your learning and explain why you find it enjoyable or useful.

例: Initially, I learned history from my teachers at school. After graduating, I started learning from books and visiting historical sites. These visits provide real evidence of the past, which makes learning history more interesting and meaningful for me.

提案: Focus on expressing your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid fragmented sentences. Be specific about the benefits, such as learning from past mistakes to improve the future.

例: I believe the main benefit of learning history is to understand past mistakes so that we can avoid repeating them. By studying history, we can learn valuable lessons that help us make better decisions in the future.

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer with connected sentences. Explain why learning history is important by giving specific reasons, such as understanding identity and improving life.

例: Yes, I think learning history is very important because it helps us understand what happened in the past and who we are. This knowledge allows us to know our roots, improve ourselves, and develop a better life.

× I have studied history when I was in the high school and also in university, but every time I would like to study it, I. Grab some books and study it. At my house. And I really like it because I can learn every lesson in the past to adjust.

✓ I studied history when I was in high school and also in university, but every time I would like to study it, I grab some books and study at my house. And I really like it because I can learn every lesson from the past to adjust.

The sentence incorrectly uses present perfect 'have studied' with a specific past time 'when I was in high school'. The correct tense is simple past 'studied'. Also, 'the high school' should be 'high school' without 'the'. The fragmented sentences 'I. Grab some books' and 'study it. At my house.' should be combined properly. 'Learn every lesson in the past to adjust' is unclear; 'from the past' is more appropriate.

× At first I learned my history through my teacher and when I grow up and when I graduated I learned history from. Books from evidence from the real places I've been to like historic site and it's very good every fund.

✓ At first I learned history through my teacher, and when I grew up and graduated, I learned history from books and evidence from real places I've been to, like historic sites, and it's very good and fun.

The phrase 'when I grow up' should be past tense 'when I grew up' to match the past context. The sentence has fragmented parts and missing conjunctions; these are corrected for clarity. 'Historic site' should be plural 'historic sites' to match the context. 'Every fund' is likely a typo for 'very fun'.

× I think the most beneficial for learning history is to learn something that. There were a mistakes and. Adjust them. 2. The more than way and try to not. Feedback to that mistake again.

✓ I think the most beneficial thing about learning history is to learn from mistakes and adjust them. Moreover, try not to repeat those mistakes again.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'There were a mistakes' is incorrect; it should be 'there were mistakes' or better 'learn from mistakes'. 'The more than way' is unclear and replaced with 'Moreover'. 'Try to not feedback to that mistake again' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'try not to repeat those mistakes again'.

× Yes, this is very important to know that. What happened in the past and? Who are we so we can know our route an? Improved too. Develop over. Live better.

✓ Yes, it is very important to know what happened in the past and who we are so we can know our roots and improve, develop, and live better.

The sentence has fragmented parts and incorrect word forms. 'Who are we' should be 'who we are' in indirect speech. 'Our route an' is likely 'our roots and'. 'Improved too. Develop over. Live better.' are fragments and should be combined into 'improve, develop, and live better' to form a coherent sentence.