History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), you should try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details with linking words. For example, instead of saying 'I have started histories and I was in grade 10 for my opening,' say 'Yes, I started studying history in grade 10.' Also, avoid vague phrases like 'made me feel tired anymore' and be more specific about your feelings or challenges.

例: Yes, I started studying history in grade 10. I find it quite challenging because I have to remember many important dates, such as the years of different kings. Moreover, there are numerous events from the past that I need to understand, which sometimes makes me feel overwhelmed.

提案: In English (Cambodia), improve your answer by using correct sentence structures and clearer linking words. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details using linking words like 'for example' or 'because.' Avoid grammatical errors such as 'Where am not good' and use 'I am not good at history.' Also, be concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I am not very good at history, but I learn it by following my friends' recommendations. For example, I take notes during class because it helps me remember important dates and events. This method helps me stay calm and understand the subject better.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on making your answer more structured and clear. Begin with a topic sentence that directly answers the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'for my opening' or 'even an.'

例: Learning history has many benefits. It helps us understand how past events started and ended. Moreover, history provides us with valuable knowledge about our ancestors, which is important for our generation to learn and remember.

提案: In English (Cambodia), improve your answer by correcting grammar and making your ideas clearer. Start with a direct answer, then explain why history is important using specific reasons and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I sang learning history' and 'while you were bald knowledge.'

例: Yes, I think learning history is very important because it helps us gain knowledge that we can pass on to future generations. Also, history reflects past actions, traditions, and cultures, which help us understand different cultures better.

× I have started histories and I was in grade 10 for my opening.

✓ I have started history and I was in grade 10 for my opening.

The word 'histories' is incorrect here because 'history' as a subject is uncountable and should be singular. Use 'history' instead of 'histories'.

× History is a subject that is very complicated because it challenged me to remember the year of the King.

✓ History is a subject that is very complicated because it challenges me to remember the year of the King.

The verb 'challenged' is in past tense but the sentence is describing a general fact, so present tense 'challenges' is appropriate.

× Also, it is a subject that made me feel tired anymore because there are so many events that happen in the past decade and it made me feel.

✓ Also, it is a subject that makes me feel tired because there are so many events that happened in the past decade and it makes me feel tired.

The word 'anymore' is incorrectly used here; it should be omitted. Also, 'made' should be 'makes' to match present tense. The sentence is incomplete and needs 'tired' at the end for clarity.

× Where am not good at history subject but I would say I learn history through the recommendation from my friends because they always offer me some tips to deal with that subject.

✓ I am not good at the history subject but I would say I learn history through recommendations from my friends because they always offer me some tips to deal with that subject.

'Where am' is incorrect; it should be 'I am'. Also, 'recommendation' should be plural 'recommendations' as it refers to multiple tips.

× For example, when the history class begin, I usually take note because it helped me to remember the years all the event that happened in the past decade.

✓ For example, when the history class begins, I usually take notes because it helps me to remember the years and all the events that happened in the past decade.

'Begin' should be 'begins' to agree with singular subject 'class'. 'Take note' should be plural 'take notes'. 'Helped' should be 'helps' to match present tense. 'Event' should be plural 'events'.

× There are so many benefits of learning history for my opening.

✓ There are so many benefits of learning history for my opinion.

The word 'opening' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'opinion'.

× It help us to understand how the past even begin and when it ends so.

✓ It helps us to understand how the past event began and when it ended.

'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Even' should be 'event'. 'Begin' and 'ends' should be in past tense 'began' and 'ended' to refer to past events.

× Learning history is a crucial things to do because they provide as many know ledge and also we are in a generation generation we must know the past, even an.

✓ Learning history is a crucial thing to do because it provides us with much knowledge and also, as we are in a new generation, we must know the past.

'Things' should be singular 'thing' to agree with 'is'. 'They' should be 'it' referring to 'learning history'. 'Know ledge' should be 'knowledge'. The sentence is incomplete and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I sang learning history is very important because it helps us again while you were bald knowledge that we can pass on to the future generation.

✓ Yes, I think learning history is very important because it helps us gain valuable knowledge that we can pass on to future generations.

'Sang' is incorrect; it should be 'think'. 'Again while you were bald' is incorrect and replaced with 'gain valuable'. 'Future generation' should be plural 'future generations'.

× Also learning history is a crucial things too though, because it's reflected past action, an tradition and culture which help us to understand more culture.

✓ Also, learning history is a crucial thing too because it reflects past actions, traditions, and culture which help us to understand more about culture.

'Things' should be singular 'thing'. 'It's reflected' should be 'it reflects'. 'Action' and 'an tradition' should be plural 'actions' and 'traditions'. Added 'about' for clarity.