Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'they are responsible of me and they take care of me', you can say 'because they are responsible for me and support my needs.'

例: Yes, I have borrowed money before because, as a student, I don't have a salary. Usually, I ask my parents for help since they are responsible for supporting me financially.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to clarify your ideas and use correct vocabulary. For example, instead of 'Lansing', use 'lending'. Also, organize your answer logically with linking words to explain your point clearly.

例: Not really, because I don't have my own income. However, I sometimes give money to my siblings as gifts rather than lending it to them.

× I usually take money from my mother or my father because they are responsible of me and they take care of me, so they have to pay for everything I need.

✓ I usually take money from my mother or my father because they are responsible for me and they take care of me, so they have to pay for everything I need.

The phrase 'responsible of me' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use with 'responsible' is 'for'. So, it should be 'responsible for me'. This is a common prepositional error that affects the meaning and correctness of the sentence.

× But I do sometimes give my siblings as a gift, so I give them my money but not Lansing to them.

✓ But I do sometimes give my siblings gifts, so I give them my money but not lending to them.

The phrase 'give my siblings as a gift' is incorrect because 'siblings' are people and cannot be given as gifts. The correct phrase is 'give my siblings gifts'. Also, 'Lansing' is a misspelling of 'lending'. The correct phrase is 'not lending to them'. This corrects the preposition and verb usage errors.

× And yeah, I usually bought a money more than Lansing money.

✓ And yeah, I usually buy more money than lending money.

The use of 'bought' (past tense) is incorrect here because the sentence talks about a habitual action indicated by 'usually'. The verb should be in the present tense 'buy'. Also, 'a money' is incorrect because 'money' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. The phrase 'more than Lansing money' is unclear and likely meant to be 'more than lending money'. This corrects tense and noun usage errors.