Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid repeating the same information and add a bit more detail to make your response richer.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my parents since I am currently unemployed. For instance, I usually ask them for money to buy clothes or food when needed.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and avoid redundancy. Also, correct grammatical errors and provide specific examples to support your points.

例: I usually don't lend money to others because I am unemployed and do not have a steady income. However, if my friends are in urgent need, I try to help them by lending some money, as I believe in supporting close friends.

× Usually I don't lend money to others because I currently unemployed and don't receive a salary.

✓ Usually I don't lend money to others because I am currently unemployed and don't receive a salary.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' to correctly form the present continuous tense 'am unemployed'. In English, the verb 'to be' is required before adjectives to describe a current state. So, 'I currently unemployed' should be 'I am currently unemployed'. This correction ensures proper subject-verb agreement and tense usage.

× However, I do lend money to my friends because if they need.

✓ However, I do lend money to my friends if they need it.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'need'. The phrase 'because if they need' is incorrect and confusing. It should be restructured to 'if they need it' to complete the thought clearly. This correction improves sentence completeness and clarity.