Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect the naturalness and clarity. For example, "hasn't hadn't started" is incorrect and redundant. Also, the word "unfortunately" is used incorrectly when you mean to express gratitude. Try to use simpler, correct expressions and avoid redundancy. Additionally, linking words like "because" or "so" can improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money once from my ex-boyfriend because I had just graduated and hadn't started my job yet. I needed some money to cover my living expenses for that month. Fortunately, he was very helpful and generous, and I paid him back after receiving my first salary.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes, such as "learned lend money" instead of "lent money." The sentence structure is also confusing, and filler words like "umm" reduce fluency. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear, concise sentences using appropriate linking words. Avoid filler words and ensure correct verb forms.

例: No, I have never lent money to others because my friends are financially responsible and usually don't ask for help. Therefore, I haven't had the opportunity to lend money to anyone.

× Yes, I only borrowed the money once from my ex-boyfriend.

✓ Yes, I borrowed money only once from my ex-boyfriend.

The original sentence is mostly correct but 'only borrowed the money once' is slightly awkward. Moving 'only' before 'once' and removing 'the' before 'money' makes the sentence more natural. The past tense 'borrowed' is correctly used here.

× It was when I just graduated and my job hasn't hadn't started so I had to borrow some money for covering my living cost of that month.

✓ It was when I had just graduated and my job hadn't started, so I had to borrow some money to cover my living costs for that month.

The sentence contains a double auxiliary verb 'hasn't hadn't' which is incorrect. The correct past perfect form is 'hadn't started'. Also, 'for covering' should be 'to cover' and 'living cost' should be plural 'living costs' to match standard usage.

× Unfortunately my ex-boyfriend was very helpful and generous.

✓ Fortunately, my ex-boyfriend was very helpful and generous.

The use of 'Unfortunately' contradicts the positive description of the ex-boyfriend being helpful and generous. 'Fortunately' fits better to express a positive outcome.

× I paid him back after I received my first month of salary.

✓ I paid him back after I received my first month's salary.

The phrase 'first month of salary' is better expressed as 'first month's salary' to indicate possession. The past tense verbs 'paid' and 'received' are correctly used.

× No, unfortunately my friends around me are very responsible for themselves in terms of financial management so none of them ever asked me for help because if they need some money, umm so no I never learned lend money to others.

✓ No, unfortunately, my friends around me are very responsible for themselves in terms of financial management, so none of them have ever asked me for help because if they need some money, umm, so no, I have never lent money to others.

The sentence has several issues: 'none of them ever asked' should be 'none of them have ever asked' to match present perfect tense for experience; 'I never learned lend money' is incorrect, it should be 'I have never lent money' (past participle of 'lend'); commas are added for clarity; 'lend' is the correct verb form here, not 'learned'.