Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends when necessary because I believe that a friend in need is a friend indeed. For example, last month I borrowed some money to cover unexpected expenses, and my friend was happy to help.

提案: Your answer repeats the same idea and is slightly unclear. To improve, provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be specific about whom you help and why, avoiding repetition.

例: Yes, I often lend money to others because I believe in supporting those in need. For instance, I usually help my friends and family members, especially mothers, because they have always supported me when I needed assistance.

× Yes, I do borrow money from my friends whenever I need, because it's not bad thing to borrow money because friend in need is a friend indeed actually.

✓ Yes, I do borrow money from my friends whenever I need, because it's not a bad thing to borrow money since a friend in need is a friend indeed.

The phrase 'not bad thing' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'bad thing'. Also, 'because friend in need is a friend indeed actually' is awkward and missing the article 'a' before 'friend in need'. The correct phrase is 'a friend in need is a friend indeed'. Using articles correctly is important for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Whenever I need help, my friends, my family always came up to help me and also I go to help them whenever they need.

✓ Whenever I need help, my friends and my family always come up to help me, and I also go to help them whenever they need.

The verb 'came' is in the past tense, but the sentence context is about habitual actions, so the present tense 'come' should be used. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'and' to connect the clauses properly. Using the correct tense for habitual actions is essential for clear communication.