Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct response first, then explain your reason clearly using linking words. Avoid repeating words and ensure correct grammar, such as subject-verb agreement. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: No, I have never borrowed money from others because I feel uncomfortable doing so. Moreover, I dislike the feeling of owing money and the pressure it creates. For instance, some people keep asking for repayment, which I find stressful.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Please provide a complete response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they were in trouble. For example, once a friend needed help to pay for urgent medical bills. As a good friend, I felt it was important to support them during difficult times.

× And they, they always calls me and ask, ask for money and I don't like that.

✓ And they always call me and ask for money, and I don't like that.

The verb 'calls' is incorrectly used with the plural subject 'they'. The correct form is 'call' to agree with the plural subject. Similarly, 'ask' is correct as it is.

× Yeah, I have money for others like my friends because they are in, sometimes they are in troubles uh, as a friend I have to see them very good.

✓ Yeah, I have lent money to others like my friends because sometimes they are in trouble. As a friend, I have to support them well.

The original sentence has structural issues and unclear phrasing. 'I have money for others' is incorrect; it should be 'I have lent money to others'. 'They are in troubles' should be 'they are in trouble' as 'trouble' is uncountable here. 'I have to see them very good' is unclear and corrected to 'I have to support them well' for clarity and correctness.