Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不完整。建议回答时先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持，避免语法错误和断句不清。

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my friends and banks. For example, I took a mortgage loan to buy a Tesla car because it was expensive and I needed financial support.

提案: 回答中表达不够流畅，句子结构不完整，缺少连接词使内容显得零散。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并提供具体例子说明。

例: Yes, I sometimes lend money to my relatives and friends because they might need help. For instance, if someone faces unexpected expenses, I am willing to support them financially.

× Mortgage because I would like to buy a car.

✓ I took a mortgage because I would like to buy a car.

原句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子结构不完整。应补充完整的主语和谓语，使句子表达完整。

× It's a Tesla, so I think borrow money is.

✓ It's a Tesla, so I think borrowing money is necessary.

原句结构不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，导致表达不清晰。应补充完整句子，使意思明确。

× I sometimes lend money to others because I think maybe someone they need help.

✓ I sometimes lend money to others because I think maybe someone needs help.

原句中“someone they need help”结构不正确，缺少谓语动词。应使用“someone needs help”表达正确的主谓关系。

× I lend money to relatives or also kind of friends and sometimes I think in the world there may be some unexpected things happen which needs money.

✓ I lend money to relatives or friends, and sometimes I think there may be some unexpected things happening in the world which need money.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词和正确的动词形式，导致句意不清。应调整句子结构，使用正确的动词形式和连接词，使句子通顺。