Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat pengulangan serta kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dengan kalimat topik yang jelas, diikuti oleh detail pendukung yang spesifik dan menggunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran. Hindari pengulangan dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from others when I didn't have any cash in my wallet. Usually, I borrow from my friends and repay them later through mobile banking, which is very convenient.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa dan kurang terstruktur dengan baik. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan, sertakan detail spesifik, dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan alami.

例: Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they didn't have cash. I usually give them the money in person, and they pay me back later via mobile banking. This way, we help each other easily.

× Yes, I have borrowed money from others it because when at that time I don't I don't have money, I don't have a cash in my wallet.

✓ Yes, I have borrowed money from others because at that time I didn't have money; I didn't have any cash in my wallet.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors including unnecessary repetition and incorrect tense usage. 'I don't I don't have money' is repetitive and incorrect for past context; it should be 'I didn't have money' to match the past situation. Also, 'a cash' is incorrect because 'cash' is uncountable and does not take an article. The sentence is corrected to improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So I just borrow them and I transfer them in a from the mobile banking and some and I think I just yeah.

✓ So I just borrow money and transfer it through mobile banking, and I think that's it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear, with incorrect verb forms and unnecessary words. 'Borrow' should be in past tense to match the context, but since the student is describing a habitual action, present tense is acceptable. 'Transfer them in a from the mobile banking' is incorrect; it should be 'transfer it through mobile banking'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper verb usage.

× Yes, of course I've ever lend money from it to others like my friends when they are no cash in their wallet.

✓ Yes, of course I've lent money to others, like my friends, when they have no cash in their wallet.

The verb 'lend' in present tense is incorrect after 'I've' (I have). The correct past participle form is 'lent'. Also, 'they are no cash' is incorrect; it should be 'they have no cash' to indicate possession. The sentence is corrected to fix verb form and verb usage errors.

× So I when I'm and I have cash in my wallet so I blend them and they would repeat me through the mobile banking.

✓ So when I have cash in my wallet, I lend them money, and they would repay me through mobile banking.

The sentence has several errors: 'blend' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'lend'. 'Repeat me' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'repay me'. Also, the sentence structure is fragmented and unclear. The correction fixes verb choice and sentence structure for clarity.

× So it's like a Gen. Z that's helping each other.

✓ So it's like Gen Z helping each other.

The phrase 'a Gen. Z' is incorrect because 'Gen Z' refers to a generation and is uncountable; no article 'a' is needed. Also, 'that's helping each other' is awkward; 'helping each other' is sufficient. The sentence is corrected for article usage and smoother phrasing.