Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các cụm từ không chính xác như "serve my old principals" và nên giải thích rõ hơn về hoàn cảnh mượn tiền. Hãy sử dụng các câu ngắn gọn, trực tiếp và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from others when I needed it urgently but didn't have enough cash. For example, last month I borrowed some money from a friend to pay for unexpected expenses.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời cần cụ thể hơn và tránh dùng các cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như "serve their old problems". Hãy cung cấp ví dụ rõ ràng và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have lent money to my friends when they needed help. For instance, I lent money to a friend so she could buy something important for herself.

× Yes, I have these at times that I need to use money, but I don't have money here so I need to borrow money from others to serve my old principals.

✓ Yes, I have these times when I need to use money, but I don't have money here so I need to borrow money from others to solve my old problems.

The word 'these' is incorrectly used to refer to 'times'; it should be 'these times' or simply 'times'. Also, 'serve my old principals' is incorrect; the intended phrase is likely 'solve my old problems'. 'Principals' and 'problems' are different words with different meanings. The sentence needs correction to properly express the intended meaning.

× Yes, I have these at times that I need to use money, but I don't have money here so I need to borrow money from others to serve my old principals.

✓ Yes, I have these times when I need to use money, but I don't have money here so I need to borrow money from others to solve my old problems.

The phrase 'at times that' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'times when' to indicate specific occasions. Using the correct preposition improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I helped lend money to others to have them serve their old problems.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to others to help them solve their old problems.

The phrase 'helped lend money' is awkward and incorrect; 'have lent money' is the correct present perfect form. Also, 'have them serve their old problems' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'help them solve their old problems'. The pronoun 'them' is correctly used here, but the verb phrases need correction.

× For example, I usually lend my friends to have her buy the things she wants.

✓ For example, I usually lend money to my friends so that they can buy the things they want.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'lend my friends' which implies lending the person, not money. The correct phrase is 'lend money to my friends'. Also, 'to have her buy' is incorrect because the pronouns do not agree; 'her' should be 'them' to match 'friends' (plural). The corrected sentence uses 'so that they can buy' to express purpose clearly.