Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但语言不够自然，句子结构有些混乱，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免重复，并且用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I have. For example, last year I borrowed some money from my brother because I didn't have enough to pay the rent. At that time, I felt quite nervous, worrying that he might refuse to help me.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，内容不够具体。建议改进语法，使用更准确的词汇，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I often lend money to my sister because she is living in poor conditions and cannot afford her rent. Therefore, I want to support her financially whenever she needs help.

× Last year I just borrowed some money from my brother because at that time I didn't have enough money to pay the house.

✓ Last year I just borrowed some money from my brother because at that time I didn't have enough money to pay for the house.

这里缺少介词“for”，短语应为“pay for the house”，表示支付房子的费用。

× Well, at that time I felt so nervous and I was thinking if he didn't want.

✓ Well, at that time I felt so nervous and I was thinking that he might not want to lend me money.

原句结构不完整，缺少宾语和完整的从句，导致句意不明。需要补充完整的从句表达“我在想他是否不愿意借钱给我”。

× I often lend my money to my sister because she is a living or poor conditions and she can't afford to pay her rent so I want to help her.

✓ I often lend my money to my sister because she is living in poor conditions and she can't afford to pay her rent, so I want to help her.

短语“is a living or poor conditions”不正确，应为“is living in poor conditions”，表示“生活在贫困的环境中”。此外，句子中缺少逗号分隔两个分句。