Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant to the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I rarely borrow money from others. However, last month I wanted to buy a pair of sneakers, but I didn't have enough money. So, I asked my cousin to lend me some money, and she kindly agreed.

提案: Your answer has good intent but lacks clarity and correct grammar. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, use proper tenses, and provide specific supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I sometimes lend money to my friends when they need it. If I have enough money, I am happy to help them without expecting anything in return because I believe it is important to support others during difficult times.

× I usually never borrowed money from anyone but I remember last month I really wanted to buy a sneakers and it was costed me around my legs and my arm but I have managed my money but it was less than I asked to my cousin and borrow money to her.

✓ I usually never borrow money from anyone but I remember last month I really wanted to buy a pair of sneakers and it cost me around my legs and my arm but I managed my money. It was less than I asked my cousin, so I borrowed money from her.

The sentence contains multiple past tense errors. 'Usually never borrowed' should be 'usually never borrow' to indicate habitual action in present tense. 'Was costed me' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'cost me'. 'I have managed' should be 'I managed' to maintain past tense consistency. 'I asked to my cousin' should be 'I asked my cousin' as 'ask' does not require 'to' in this context. 'Borrow money to her' should be 'borrowed money from her' because you borrow from someone, not to someone. Also, 'a sneakers' is incorrect; 'sneakers' is plural, so 'a pair of sneakers' is correct.

× Yes, sometimes whenever my friend or clothes will need money and if I have then I would really lend them money without expecting them anything because it is very important to help other in their hard time.

✓ Yes, sometimes whenever my friends or close ones need money and if I have it, then I really lend them money without expecting anything in return because it is very important to help others in their hard times.

The sentence misuses modal verbs and has subject-verb agreement issues. 'Will need' should be 'need' to express habitual action. 'My friend or clothes' is incorrect; likely meant 'friends or close ones'. 'If I have then I would' should be 'if I have it, then I really lend' to express present possibility and habitual action. 'Expecting them anything' should be 'expecting anything in return'. 'Help other' should be 'help others' to use correct plural form. 'Their hard time' should be 'their hard times' for natural expression.