Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and structured. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about how borrowing money helps you.

例: Yes, I have borrowed money from my parents several times. They usually suggest that I take some cash when I go out shopping. For instance, they give me a fixed amount of ₹2000 every month, which helps me manage my expenses comfortably.

提案: Your response needs better grammar and clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and avoid repetition. Also, try to be concise and directly answer the question with relevant details.

例: Yes, I recently lent ₹2000 to my younger brother because our parents were not giving him money. He had just bought sneakers worth ₹10,000, so I helped him by lending money to buy a nice outfit for his annual function.

× Yes absolutely I have borrowed money from my parents and always my parents suggested me to take some money if I am going out or doing any shopping.

✓ Yes absolutely I have borrowed money from my parents and always my parents suggested me to take some money if I am going out or doing any shopping.

No correction needed for pronouns in this sentence.

× My parents are very a good-natured person and always render me a lot of money and every monthly ₹2000 are permanent.

✓ My parents are very good-natured people and always give me a lot of money, and every month ₹2000 is permanent.

'Very a good-natured person' is incorrect because 'very' should not be used with 'a' before an adjective; also, 'parents' is plural, so 'person' should be 'people'. 'Render me a lot of money' is awkward; 'give me a lot of money' is better. 'Every monthly ₹2000 are permanent' is incorrect; 'every month' is the correct phrase, and '₹2000' is singular amount, so 'is' should be used instead of 'are'.

× Just recently I have learned a ₹2000 to my younger brother as my parents are not giving him money as as recently he have received sneakers of 10,000 so I lend him 2000 more rupees for his annual function as he should buy a pretty dress for him.

✓ Just recently I have lent ₹2000 to my younger brother as my parents are not giving him money. Recently, he received sneakers worth ₹10,000, so I lent him 2000 more rupees for his annual function so that he could buy a pretty dress for himself.

'Have learned' is incorrect here; the correct past participle of 'lend' is 'lent'. 'He have received' should be 'he has received' or 'he received'. 'I lend' should be 'I lent' to maintain past tense consistency. 'As he should buy a pretty dress for him' is incorrect; 'so that he could buy a pretty dress for himself' is correct to express purpose and reflexive pronoun use.