Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容较为完整，但语言表达不够自然，有些语法错误（如时态和冠词使用），且句子较长，缺少适当的连接词。建议注意时态一致性，使用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I rarely borrow money from others. However, I once borrowed some from my mother when I moved to Beijing to find a job. Fortunately, I was able to repay her as soon as I received my salary.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（learned应为lent），句子结构较复杂且有些冗长，表达不够简洁自然。建议注意单词拼写，简化句子结构，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I used to lend money to my sister quite often a few years ago. However, now I avoid doing so because I feel it makes her too dependent on me.

× I hardly ever borrowed money from others, even though I'm in a desperate place.

✓ I hardly ever borrow money from others, even though I'm in a desperate place.

这里的时间状语“hardly ever”表示习惯性动作，且后文“I'm in a desperate place”使用现在时，说明动作发生在现在或一般情况下，因此动词应使用一般现在时“borrow”，而不是过去时“borrowed”。

× I only borrowed money from my mother once when I was moving to find a job in Beijing, and fortunately I am able to pay her back the money as soon as I received my salary.

✓ I only borrowed money from my mother once when I was moving to find a job in Beijing, and fortunately I was able to pay her back the money as soon as I received my salary.

前半句描述过去的动作，后半句“am able to pay”应与前文时态保持一致，改为过去时“was able to pay”，因为“received my salary”是过去时，整个句子描述的是过去的事件。

× I learned money to my sister very often a few years ago, but nowadays I don't lend her money because I feel like I'm encouraging her to borrow money from me and it made her very dependent on me, so I think I should not do it.

✓ I lent money to my sister very often a few years ago, but nowadays I don't lend her money because I feel like I'm encouraging her to borrow money from me and it makes her very dependent on me, so I think I should not do it.

动词“learned”用错，应为“lent”，表示借出钱的过去式。后半句“it made her very dependent”应与现在时态“I feel like”保持一致，改为“it makes her very dependent”，因为这里描述的是现在的情况。