Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and incorrect word order. Also correct tense and word choice (e.g., “they might not give it back” not “they can be. Don't give me my money back”). Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

例: No, I haven’t borrowed money from others. I avoid borrowing because I worry that some relatives or friends might not be able to pay me back. For this reason, I prefer to manage my expenses on my own and save for emergencies.

提案: Provide a clear, direct answer and give specific details (how often, why, typical amounts or situations). Use correct expressions for frequency (e.g., “twice a week”) and simple past or present perfect correctly. Link your ideas with words like “because” or “so” and avoid vague phrases like “I don't know why.”

例: Yes, I often lend money to my grandparents. I usually give them small amounts twice a week because they need help buying groceries and medicine, and I want to support them financially.

× To be honest, no, because if I borrowed money from others, for example, for my relatives, my parents, my friends, they can be. Don't give me my money back. And I don't want to say give me it please.

✓ To be honest, no, because if I borrowed money from others, for example relatives, parents, or friends, they might not give me my money back, and I don't want to have to ask them to return it.

Errors involve incorrect modal verb and sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type IDs 4 and 26). The original uses 'can be. Don't give me my money back' which is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'might not give me my money back' to express possibility and negation correctly. Also 'say give me it please' is incorrect word order; use 'have to ask them to return it' or 'ask them to give it back.' Suggestions: use appropriate modal verbs for possibility (might/could), keep negation with the verb (might not give), and use correct object order ('give it back' or 'ask them to return it').

× Sure, I lent money for my grandparents every twice a week. I don't know why, but I lend money.

✓ Sure, I lend money to my grandparents twice a week. I don't know why, but I keep lending them money.

Errors include incorrect use of past tense 'lent' when describing a habitual action (Grammar Problem Type ID 6), wrong preposition 'for' instead of 'to' (ID 11), and wrong adverb phrase order 'every twice a week' (ID 14/20). Use present simple 'lend' for routines: 'I lend money to my grandparents twice a week.' The second sentence should clearly show repeated action: 'I keep lending them money.' Suggestions: use 'to' with people, use 'twice a week' for frequency, and match tense to habitual actions with present simple or 'keep + -ing' to indicate recurrence.