Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and provide a brief reason using linking words. Use one clear topic sentence then one supporting sentence. Correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement and pronoun use.

例: No, I haven't. I don't like borrowing money because it makes me feel stressed and dependent on others, so I prefer to manage my finances without loans.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (use correct verb tense and forms), avoid repetition, and add one or two specific examples with linking words for coherence. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I have lent money to others quite often because I like to help friends in need. For example, I once lent a classmate money to pay their university tuition, and I usually offer small loans for urgent expenses, expecting them to repay me within a month.

× No, I haven't borrowed money from others because I don't like to borrow money from others and it give me too much stress that's why I don't like.

✓ No, I haven't borrowed money from others because I don't like borrowing money from others and it gives me too much stress, so I avoid it.

Errors include incorrect verb form after 'like' (should use the -ing form 'borrowing') and subject-verb agreement ('it give' -> 'it gives'). The sentence is also repetitive and run-on; combine ideas with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: use 'like + -ing' for general preferences and ensure verbs agree with their subjects (singular 'it' takes 'gives').

× Is I have lended money to others a lot of time because I I love to help people.

✓ Yes, I have lent money to others many times because I love to help people.

Multiple errors: 'Is I' is incorrect (wrong auxiliary/modal and word order) and should be 'Yes, I have'. 'Lended' is incorrect past participle; the correct past participle of 'lend' is 'lent'. 'A lot of time' is ungrammatical here; use 'many times'. Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary 'have' in present perfect, use irregular past participles (lent), and use 'many times' for frequency.

× If any people face any kinds of difficulty, like they didn't pay their tuition fee at their university cost anything else this time I love to lend them money.

✓ If people face any kind of difficulty, such as being unable to pay their university tuition or other expenses, I like to lend them money.

Problems: 'any people' and 'any kinds of difficulty' are unnatural; use 'people' and 'any kind of difficulty' or 'any difficulties'. 'They didn't pay' mixes past tense with a conditional; use 'being unable to pay' or 'cannot pay' for a general situation. 'Tuition fee at their university cost anything else' is ungrammatical; use 'their university tuition or other expenses'. Also 'this time' is misleading for a general habit — remove it or rephrase. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for general habits, use 'such as' to introduce examples, and use clear noun phrases ('tuition', 'expenses').