App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "midilli social media" and "For Instagram is just". Try to use more natural expressions and correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy by combining related ideas smoothly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Recently, I mostly use YouTube and Instagram. Instagram is a simple social media platform where I catch up with my friends and share my life. Meanwhile, YouTube is my main source of information because I listen to various interviews and podcasts there.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "sent up for a membership if a new app called" and "Where a pet podcast." Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and provide specific details. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I am mostly interested in apps that help me learn new knowledge. For example, I recently subscribed to an app called Carnation, which is a platform where professors and experts share lectures and professional insights through podcasts.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward sentence breaks, such as "In the middle of their lecture." and inconsistent app names like "Collision" and "Calcium." Try to use complete sentences, correct verb tenses, and clarify your points. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually find out about new apps through recommendations from people I trust. For instance, I discovered an app called Collision because a famous professor mentioned it during one of their lectures. After hearing about it, I decided to subscribe to the app.

提案: Your answer contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "discover knowledge is of different fields" and "Comma Michelle." Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific examples.

例: In the future, I would like to use more new apps to explore knowledge in different fields beyond my profession. For example, I recently discovered an app called Comma Michelle, which helps me learn a lot about history. I hope to find more platforms like this to expand my knowledge base.

× Recently I mostly use YouTube and Instagram.

✓ Recently I have mostly used YouTube and Instagram.

The sentence refers to recent past actions, so the present perfect tense 'have used' is appropriate instead of simple present 'use'. This tense better expresses actions that happened recently and may continue.

× For Instagram is just a midilli social media to catch up with my friend and share my life.

✓ Instagram is just a middle social media platform to catch up with my friends and share my life.

'Midilli' is likely a misspelling of 'middle'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' because usually one catches up with multiple friends on social media. Additionally, 'For Instagram is' is incorrect; it should be 'Instagram is' without 'For'.

× For Instagram is just a midilli social media to catch up with my friend and share my life.

✓ Instagram is just a middle social media platform to catch up with my friends and share my life.

The sentence structure is incorrect because it starts with 'For Instagram is' which is awkward. Removing 'For' improves clarity and correctness.

× Well, You Tube is my major source of information where I listen to different interviews and podcasts.

✓ Well, YouTube is my major source of information where I listen to different interviews and podcasts.

'You Tube' should be written as one word 'YouTube' as it is a proper noun and brand name.

× I am mostly interested in apps that can help me learn more studies on new knowledge.

✓ I am mostly interested in apps that can help me learn more about new knowledge.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; 'learn more about' is the correct collocation when referring to gaining knowledge.

× For example, I sent up for a membership if a new app called. Carnation, which is a platform for professors and knowledge leaders to share their lectures and share some professional knowledge.

✓ For example, I signed up for a membership of a new app called Carnation, which is a platform for professors and knowledge leaders to share their lectures and professional knowledge.

'Sent up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'signed up'. Also, 'if' should be 'of'. The period after 'called' is misplaced and should be removed. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Where a pet podcast.

✓ It also offers podcasts.

The original fragment 'Where a pet podcast.' is incomplete and unclear. Rewriting it as a complete sentence clarifies the meaning.

× I found out apps by the hearing recommendations from people I trust.

✓ I find out about apps by hearing recommendations from people I trust.

The sentence mixes past tense 'found' with present tense 'trust'. Since the habit is ongoing, present tense 'find' and 'hearing' are appropriate.

× I found out apps by the hearing recommendations from people I trust.

✓ I find out about apps by hearing recommendations from people I trust.

The phrase 'found out apps by the hearing' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'about' after 'find out', and 'hearing' should not have 'the' before it.

× For example, I discover Collision because it was recommended by a famous professor on another platform.

✓ For example, I discovered Collision because it was recommended by a famous professor on another platform.

The action of discovering happened in the past, so the past tense 'discovered' is appropriate instead of present tense 'discover'.

× In the middle of their lecture.

✓ In the middle of their lecture,

This is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the following sentence with a comma to form a complete sentence.

× They share that they are also listening to those podcasts on Calcium.

✓ They shared that they were also listening to those podcasts on Carnation.

The tense should be past to match the context. Also, 'Calcium' is likely a misspelling of 'Carnation', the app mentioned earlier.

× So I signed up for the membership.

✓ So I signed up for the membership.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I will want to use more new apps to discover knowledge is of different fields besides my profession.

✓ I would like to use more new apps to discover knowledge in different fields besides my profession.

'Will want' is awkward; 'would like' is the correct modal verb phrase to express desire. Also, 'knowledge is of' is incorrect; it should be 'knowledge in'.

× I will want to use more new apps to discover knowledge is of different fields besides my profession.

✓ I would like to use more new apps to discover knowledge in different fields besides my profession.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'knowledge in different fields' is the correct phrase.

× For example, Comma Michelle was one of my favorite new apps that I discovered recently where I can learn a lot of history knowledge.

✓ For example, Comma Michelle is one of my favorite new apps that I discovered recently, where I can learn a lot about history.

The tense should be consistent; 'is' for current favorite app. 'History knowledge' is awkward; 'learn a lot about history' is more natural.

× So in the future I will like to find out more platform to hear about different knowledge base.

✓ So in the future, I would like to find more platforms to learn about different knowledge bases.

'Will like' is incorrect; 'would like' is the proper modal verb phrase. 'Find out more platform' should be 'find more platforms' (plural). 'Hear about different knowledge base' is awkward; 'learn about different knowledge bases' is better.