App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Also, use more precise vocabulary and complete your sentences clearly.

例: I have recently been using social media apps like Instagram and Facebook to share my photos and ideas with friends and family.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Make sure to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: I am usually interested in social media apps because they help me connect with people and keep up to date with current events and celebrations.

提案: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your response coherent. Also, be specific about how YouTube helps you discover apps.

例: I usually watch YouTube videos where reviewers introduce different apps that can improve productivity, education, and language learning, which helps me find useful applications.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many incomplete sentences. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain why you want to use productivity apps in the future.

例: In the future, I would like to use productivity apps because they help me organise my day better and reduce distractions, which is important for improving my skills.

× I have a lot of social media accounts to share my ideas, my photos and different type of things.

✓ I have a lot of social media accounts to share my ideas, my photos and different types of things.

The phrase 'different type of things' is incorrect because 'type' should be pluralized to 'types' when referring to multiple kinds of things. Using the plural form 'types' correctly matches the plural noun 'things'.

× I love social media apps as I use.

✓ I love social media apps as I use them.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'use'. Adding the pronoun 'them' clarifies what is being used, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× Are usually. Interested in for social media apps?

✓ Are you usually interested in social media apps?

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. Reordering the words and adding the subject 'you' forms a proper question.

× I enjoyed these platforms becaused they allow me connect with people and stay updated on current events and celebration.

✓ I enjoy these platforms because they allow me to connect with people and stay updated on current events and celebrations.

The verb 'enjoyed' is past tense, but the context suggests a present habit, so 'enjoy' is correct. 'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. Also, 'allow me connect' is missing 'to' before 'connect'. 'Celebration' should be plural 'celebrations' to match the plural 'events'.

× Using social media also helps me express.

✓ Using social media also helps me express myself.

The verb 'express' requires an object to complete the meaning. Adding the reflexive pronoun 'myself' clarifies what is being expressed.

× I searched YouTube channels to find different type of apps to improve my productivity, my education skills and also language learning apps.

✓ I search YouTube channels to find different types of apps to improve my productivity, my educational skills and also language learning apps.

The question is about how the student finds apps generally, so present tense 'search' is more appropriate than past tense 'searched'. 'Different type' should be plural 'different types'. 'Education skills' should be 'educational skills' to use the correct adjective form.

× It's a YouTube it helps me to find. Eats and they.

✓ It's YouTube; it helps me to find apps and other things.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'It's a YouTube' is incorrect; 'It's YouTube' is better. 'Eats and they' is nonsensical and likely a mishearing or typo; replacing with 'apps and other things' makes sense in context.

× I like to use productivity apps in the to use in the future be cause.

✓ I would like to use productivity apps in the future because

The sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary words. 'In the to use in the future be cause' is incorrect. Simplifying to 'I would like to use productivity apps in the future because' corrects the structure.

× They help my day better.

✓ They help make my day better.

The original sentence lacks a verb to connect 'help' and 'my day better'. Adding 'make' clarifies the meaning.

× Productivity is quite. Important.

✓ Productivity is quite important.

The sentence is incorrectly split. Combining into one sentence without the period is correct.

× Is kill for the future an also distractions?

✓ It is a skill for the future and also helps avoid distractions.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Is kill' should be 'It is a skill'. 'An also distractions' is incorrect; rephrasing to 'and also helps avoid distractions' clarifies the meaning.