App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and natural flow. Avoid repetition like 'I I' and filler words such as 'umm'. Try to make your sentences more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Recently, I have been using various apps such as scheduling and calendar apps because they help me manage my time effectively and improve my time management skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid redundancy like 'game online more online'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for coherence.

例: These days, I am mostly interested in online games, especially puzzle games, because I find them more engaging than playing games in person.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to speak more confidently and organize your answer logically. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words.

例: I usually discover new apps through social media and YouTube. Sometimes, I also browse app stores to find apps that interest me.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'off road study'. Avoid repeating 'I think' and try to express your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure and linking words.

例: In the future, I would like to use music apps because I am preparing to study music independently, and these apps will help me listen to a variety of music genres.

× I'm satisfied with variety of apps like schedule apps and calendars.

✓ I'm satisfied with a variety of apps like schedule apps and calendars.

The phrase 'variety of apps' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'variety' because 'variety' is a singular noun here. Without 'a', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I think because I I can manage my schedule through this app so I can improve my umm, time management skills.

✓ I think because I can manage my schedule with this app, I can improve my time management skills.

The preposition 'through' is less appropriate here; 'with' is better to indicate using the app as a tool. Also, removing the repeated 'I' and adding a comma improves clarity.

× These days I'm really interested in games such as puzzle games or many things because I prefer game online more online than yeah in person.

✓ These days I'm really interested in games such as puzzle games and many other things because I prefer playing games online more than in person.

The phrase 'prefer game online more online than yeah in person' is awkward and incorrect. 'Playing games online' is the correct form, and 'more than in person' is the proper comparison. Also, 'and many other things' is clearer than 'or many things'.

× I usually find these apps through my social media or YouTube sometimes and sometimes I browsing I would I I'm browsing the apps to use them.

✓ I usually find these apps through my social media or YouTube sometimes, and sometimes I browse the apps to use them.

The verb 'browsing' should be in the base form 'browse' after 'I'. Also, the sentence is repetitive and unclear; simplifying it improves clarity.

× I think music apps, I think because I am preparing to off road study off road to study music, so I am inclined to listen a variety of music. I think so, yeah.

✓ I think music apps because I am preparing to study music off-road, so I am inclined to listen to a variety of music. I think so, yeah.

The phrase 'preparing to off road study off road to study music' is incorrect and confusing. The correct phrase is 'preparing to study music off-road'. Also, 'listen a variety of music' requires the preposition 'to' after 'listen'.