App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions, for example, say 'It is an AI simulation that helps me improve my English speaking skills, especially for iOS, and it even evaluates my band score and provides mock exams.' Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: I recently downloaded an app called IO Speaking. It is an AI simulation that helps me improve my English speaking skills, especially for the IELTS exam. The app also evaluates my band score and offers mock exams to practice.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and better vocabulary. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. For example, say 'I am usually interested in apps that support my daily life and make it more comfortable and convenient. For instance, the Grab app helps me call taxis and even order food directly.'

例: I am usually interested in apps that support my daily life and make it more comfortable and convenient. For example, the Grab app allows me to call taxis easily and even order food directly through the app.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. For example, say 'I usually find out about different apps through advertisements on billboards or YouTube. I think these ads target me because they analyze user data and algorithms.'

例: I usually find out about different apps through advertisements on billboards or on YouTube. I believe these ads target me specifically because they analyze user data and algorithms to show relevant apps.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. For example, say 'I am looking forward to using an application that helps me manage my daily life better. Although I use the Calendar app on my iPhone, I want something more convenient and detailed, which makes it easier to check upcoming events and daily tasks.'

例: I am looking forward to using an application that helps me manage my daily life better. Although I currently use the Calendar app on my iPhone, I want something more convenient and detailed, which makes it easier to check upcoming events and what I should do each day.

× It's an AI simulations that help me improve my English especially on iOS speaking and it's even evaluate my band and do those mock exams.

✓ It's an AI simulation that helps me improve my English especially on iOS speaking and it even evaluates my band and does those mock exams.

The word 'simulations' is plural but preceded by 'an' which is singular, so it should be 'simulation'. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'simulation'. Similarly, 'evaluate' and 'do' should be 'evaluates' and 'does' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× I usually am interested in the app that support my daily life and make my life more comfortable and convenient.

✓ I am usually interested in apps that support my daily life and make it more comfortable and convenient.

The pronoun 'my life' is repeated unnecessarily; replacing the second with 'it' avoids repetition. Also, 'app' should be plural 'apps' to match the general statement, and 'support' should be 'supports' if singular, but since 'apps' is plural, 'support' is correct.

× Such as app Call Grab is the app that call taxi for me and we can even order food and it directly is enough food.

✓ For example, the app Grab is the app that calls a taxi for me and we can even order food, and it delivers the food directly.

'App Call Grab' is awkward; 'the app Grab' is better. 'Call taxi' should be 'calls a taxi' to agree with singular subject. 'It directly is enough food' is incorrect; it should be 'it delivers the food directly' to make sense.

× Usually on advertising on the Billboard or on YouTube advertising and I think they already target us on me as I've seen that advertising because I think they already analyse the algorithm.

✓ Usually through advertising on billboards or YouTube, and I think they already target me as I've seen that advertising because I think they have already analyzed the algorithm.

'On advertising on the Billboard' is incorrect; 'through advertising on billboards' is correct. 'Target us on me' is incorrect; 'target me' is correct. 'Analyse' is British spelling; 'analyzed' is American spelling but both are acceptable depending on context.

× So what I find out and see those app is already my.

✓ So the apps I find and see are already tailored for me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrasing to 'the apps I find and see are already tailored for me' clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× I'm looking forward to the application that helped me with my daily life more this year.

✓ I'm looking forward to an application that will help me with my daily life more this year.

'Helped' is past tense, but the sentence refers to future expectation, so 'will help' is appropriate. 'An application' is better than 'the application' as it is unspecified.

× I use an app called Calendar on the iPhone, but I'm looking for something that is more convenient and more detailed or maybe easier to look up on what event is coming or what I should do on each day.

✓ I use an app called Calendar on the iPhone, but I'm looking for something that is more convenient and more detailed, or maybe easier to look up which events are coming or what I should do each day.

'What event is coming' should be plural 'which events are coming' to match general meaning. 'Look up on' is incorrect; 'look up' is sufficient. 'On each day' is better as 'each day' without 'on'.