App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the response more concise. For example, "Recently nowadays" is repetitive; choose one. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Recently, I have been using ChatGPT because it helps me gather information quickly and provides precise answers. Besides that, I often use YouTube and Netflix for entertainment.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating words like "like" and use linking words to connect ideas better.

例: I am usually interested in entertainment apps such as Netflix and Prime Video, where I enjoy watching movies and series. Additionally, I like using makeup apps that allow me to edit my photos and enhance their appearance.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the sources. For example, instead of "through my mails," say "through emails."

例: I usually discover new apps through advertisements on social media, emails I receive, or recommendations from my friends who suggest useful editing apps.

提案: Your answer can be improved by using clearer expressions and linking words. Also, try to be more specific about the types of tasks you want to automate.

例: In the future, I would like to use apps that can automate routine tasks, so I don't have to focus on every small detail. Moreover, I am interested in advanced editing apps that can perform automatic enhancements.

× Recently nowadays I am more interested in using ChatGPT as it helps me to gather information quickly and also it gives me precise information whenever I need it.

✓ Nowadays, I am more interested in using ChatGPT as it helps me gather information quickly and also gives me precise information whenever I need it.

The phrase 'Recently nowadays' is redundant and awkward; 'Nowadays' alone is sufficient. Also, 'helps me to gather' and 'it gives me' can be simplified to 'helps me gather' and 'gives me' for smoother present tense usage.

× The kind of apps I'm usually interested are like entertaining apps like Netflix and Prime Videos, where I usually like to watch movies and series.

✓ The kinds of apps I'm usually interested in are entertaining apps like Netflix and Prime Video, where I usually like to watch movies and series.

The phrase 'interested are like' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in are'. Also, 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'apps'. 'Prime Videos' should be 'Prime Video' as the service name is singular.

× Moreover, I'm also interested in makeup apps which where I can edit my photos and make them more beautiful and attractive.

✓ Moreover, I'm also interested in makeup apps where I can edit my photos and make them more beautiful and attractive.

The phrase 'which where' is redundant and incorrect; only 'where' is needed to refer to the apps' function.

× I mostly find about new apps through advertisements on social media or through my mails or by some of my friends who suggest me to download some apps for editing.

✓ I mostly find out about new apps through advertisements on social media, through my emails, or from some of my friends who suggest that I download some apps for editing.

The phrase 'find about' is incorrect; it should be 'find out about'. 'Mails' is better expressed as 'emails'. 'Suggest me to download' is incorrect; it should be 'suggest that I download' or 'suggest downloading'.

× I mostly find about new apps through advertisements on social media or through my mails or by some of my friends who suggest me to download some apps for editing.

✓ I mostly find out about new apps through advertisements on social media, through my emails, or from some of my friends who suggest that I download some apps for editing.

The phrase 'suggest me to download' is incorrect; the verb 'suggest' is followed by 'that' plus subject and verb, or by a gerund. Hence, 'suggest that I download' is correct.

× I would like to use apps which can automate my manual things so I don't have to just focus on every little thing, and some more advanced apps for editing which can automatically do the work.

✓ I would like to use apps that can automate my manual tasks so I don't have to focus on every little thing, and some more advanced apps for editing that can automatically do the work.

The relative pronoun 'which' is better replaced by 'that' when referring to essential clauses. Also, 'manual things' is vague; 'manual tasks' is more appropriate.