App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น ชื่อแอปพลิเคชันที่ถูกต้อง และควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้เนื้อหาดูสมเหตุสมผลและลื่นไหล

例: The apps I have recently used the most are Instagram and TikTok because they help me stay connected with my friends who live in countries like New Zealand and Norway. I often use Instagram to share photos and updates from them.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้องมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด และใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมกับบริบทเพื่อแสดงความสนใจในแอปพลิเคชันต่างๆ

例: I am usually interested in educational and productivity apps because they help me learn new skills and manage my time effectively. For example, language learning apps like Duolingo motivate me to improve my English, while management apps help me stay organized and meet deadlines.

提案: คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้เนื้อหาดูสมเหตุสมผลและเข้าใจง่าย

例: I usually find out about different apps through recommendations from my friends and family. They often share useful internet apps. Additionally, I explore app stores like Google Play and the App Store to discover new apps in various categories.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติ และให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนเกี่ยวกับแอปที่ต้องการใช้ในอนาคต

例: In the future, I would like to use educational apps that focus on language learning and skill development. These apps often offer online lessons and provide feedback, which makes learning more interesting and effective. Additionally, I am interested in health and fitness apps that track physical activity and provide complete workout plans.

× Well the app that I have used the most would be its RAM and Tiktok because they allow me to stay, continue, connect with my friends who are living in country such as New Land and Norway.

✓ Well the apps that I have used the most would be Instagram and Tiktok because they allow me to stay connected with my friends who are living in countries such as New Land and Norway.

The word 'app' should be plural 'apps' because more than one app is mentioned. 'its RAM' is incorrect and replaced with 'Instagram' as likely intended. 'country' should be plural 'countries' because it refers to multiple places. Also, 'stay, continue, connect' is awkward; 'stay connected' is the correct phrase.

× I often use Instagram to share photo and update from them.

✓ I often use Instagram to share photos and updates from them.

The nouns 'photo' and 'update' should be plural 'photos' and 'updates' because they refer to multiple items.

× I am usually interested in education and provide productive apps because they help me learn a new skill and manage my time effectively.

✓ I am usually interested in educational and productivity apps because they help me learn new skills and manage my time effectively.

The adjectives 'education' and 'provide productive' are incorrect; they should be 'educational' and 'productivity' to correctly describe the types of apps.

× For example, learning language app like doing lingo help me motivation to improve my English which why management app help me stay organized and meet deadline.

✓ For example, language learning apps like Duolingo help motivate me to improve my English, which is why management apps help me stay organized and meet deadlines.

'learning language app' should be 'language learning apps' (plural). 'doing lingo' is corrected to 'Duolingo' (proper noun). 'help me motivation' is incorrect; it should be 'help motivate me'. 'management app' should be plural 'management apps'. 'meet deadline' should be 'meet deadlines'.

× I usually find out different app tool recommendation for my friend and my family.

✓ I usually find out different app tool recommendations from my friends and my family.

'app tool recommendation' should be plural 'app tool recommendations'. 'friend' should be plural 'friends'.

× I usually find out different app tool recommendation for my friend and my family.

✓ I usually find out different app tool recommendations from my friends and my family.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'from' is the correct preposition to indicate the source of recommendations.

× Also they often share useful Internet app.

✓ Also, they often share useful Internet apps.

'app' should be plural 'apps' because it refers to multiple applications.

× They discover additionally a export App Store like Google Pay and Apps Web store, while app category are Liquid menu.

✓ They also discover export App Stores like Google Pay and Apps Web Store, while app categories are Liquid menu.

'discover additionally' is awkward; 'also discover' is better. 'a export' should be 'export' without 'a' or 'an'. 'App Store' should be plural 'App Stores' if referring to multiple. 'app category are' should be 'app categories are' (plural subject and verb agreement). 'Liquid menu' is unclear but kept as is.

× In the future, I would like to use education app that focus on learning language and skill development, which app often offer Internet lesson and provider feedback which can make learning more interesting and effective.

✓ In the future, I would like to use educational apps that focus on language learning and skill development, which often offer internet lessons and provide feedback that can make learning more interesting and effective.

'education app' should be plural 'educational apps'. 'focus' should be 'focus' to agree with plural 'apps'. 'learning language' should be 'language learning'. 'offer Internet lesson' should be 'offer internet lessons'. 'provider feedback' should be 'provide feedback'.

× Additionally, I am learning in health fitness app that treats physical activity and provide total workout plan.

✓ Additionally, I am using health and fitness apps that promote physical activity and provide total workout plans.

'learning in health fitness app' is incorrect; 'using health and fitness apps' is better. 'treats' is incorrect; 'promote' fits better. 'provide total workout plan' should be 'provide total workout plans' (plural).