App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현을 줄이고, 문장을 자연스럽게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 시제 일치와 전치사 사용에 주의하고, 문장을 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: Recently, I have been using YouTube because I want to watch a violent contest. Currently, the Moreland contest is being held in Seoul.

提案: 문장 구조를 명확히 하고, 어휘 선택을 개선하여 자연스럽고 효과적인 답변을 만들어야 합니다. 또한, 불필요한 단어를 줄이고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요.

例: As far as I'm concerned, I usually use an app called Mahabuka. It is an English learning app, and through it, I have learned many English vocabulary words, so it is very useful.

提案: 의미 전달이 명확하지 않으므로, 문장을 간결하고 논리적으로 재구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 올바른 어휘와 문법을 사용하여 자신의 의견을 분명히 표현하세요.

例: In my opinion, I usually search for apps using a Korean search engine similar to Google. Sometimes, my family and friends recommend apps to me.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하여 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결어를 사용해 답변을 더 논리적으로 만드세요.

例: In the future, I would like to use apps that allow me to search for and watch a lot of information and videos because they are useful to me, and I really enjoy watching and searching for them.

× Recently I use on YouTube because I want to watching violent contest.

✓ Recently I use YouTube because I want to watch violent contests.

'Use' is correct in present tense but 'want to watching' is incorrect; it should be 'want to watch' because 'want to' is followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'contest' should be plural 'contests' to match the context.

× Recently I use on YouTube because I want to watching violent contest.

✓ Recently I use YouTube because I want to watch violent contests.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary after 'use' when referring to an app; we say 'use YouTube' not 'use on YouTube'.

× For now, Moreland's contest is played in Seoul.

✓ Currently, Moreland's contest is being played in Seoul.

'Is played' is simple present passive, but the event is ongoing, so present continuous passive 'is being played' is more appropriate.

× As far as I'm concerned I listen to use application named by Mahabuka.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I use an application named Mahabuka.

'Listen to use' is incorrect; 'use' is the correct verb here. Also, 'named by' is incorrect; it should be 'named' without 'by'.

× As far as I'm concerned I listen to use application named by Mahabuka.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I use an application named Mahabuka.

The article 'an' is needed before 'application' because it is a singular countable noun.

× This is studying English app and I through this I learned many English vocabulary, so it's very useful.

✓ This is an English learning app, and through it, I have learned many English vocabulary words, so it's very useful.

'Studying English app' is awkward; 'English learning app' is better. 'I through this I learned' is incorrect; it should be 'through it, I have learned' to indicate experience. 'Vocabulary' is uncountable, so 'many vocabulary' is incorrect; 'many vocabulary words' is better.

× In my point, I usually search the neighbor This is a Korean like Google yeah search app and sometimes I'll I'm recommended my families and friends.

✓ In my opinion, I usually use an app called Neighbor. This is a Korean search app like Google, and sometimes my family and friends recommend apps to me.

'In my point' should be 'In my opinion'. 'Search the neighbor' is incorrect; it should be 'use an app called Neighbor'. 'I'll I'm recommended' is incorrect; it should be 'my family and friends recommend'.

× sometimes I'll I'm recommended my families and friends.

✓ Sometimes my family and friends recommend apps to me.

'I'll I'm recommended' is incorrect pronoun and verb usage; the correct form is 'my family and friends recommend'.

× sometimes I'll I'm recommended my families and friends.

✓ Sometimes my family and friends recommend apps to me.

'Families' is plural but usually 'family' is used as a collective noun here.

× So yes this majors.

✓ So yes, these are my main sources.

'This majors' is ungrammatical and unclear; it should be rephrased to clarify meaning.

× I want to use some apps can search and watching a lot of information and videos because it is useful for me and I really into watching and searching them so yes.

✓ I want to use some apps that can search and show a lot of information and videos because they are useful for me, and I really enjoy watching and searching them.

The sentence lacks a relative pronoun 'that' after 'apps'. 'Can search and watching' is incorrect; it should be 'can search and show' or 'can search and watch'. 'I really into' is incorrect; it should be 'I really enjoy'.