App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and lacks clarity. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. For example, mention the app name, why you used it, and your opinion about it in a clear and concise way.

例: Recently, I used a shopping app called 'ShopEasy' that my friend recommended. It allows me to buy various products from home, which is very convenient. Moreover, the app offers good discounts, making shopping affordable and enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid grammatical errors and incomplete thoughts.

例: I am usually interested in entertainment and educational apps. For instance, I use YouTube to watch videos for both fun and study purposes. Additionally, I use the BDMI app to access important information related to my courses.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add specific details. Also, complete your sentences and avoid vague phrases.

例: I usually find new apps by asking my friends for recommendations. Besides that, I explore popular websites like Playstore, which is well-known in my country for offering a wide range of applications.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy.

例: In the future, I would like to use shopping apps that offer a wide variety of daily essentials and home products. This would allow me to conveniently purchase items from home, saving time and effort.

× There are a lot of apps that I use on my daily basis but I recently tried a shopping app that recommended by my friend whose name is once and he usually spend his time on searching different application and I think with the help of application person able to do anything by sitting at home so like shopping and.

✓ There are a lot of apps that I use on my daily basis but I recently tried a shopping app that was recommended by my friend whose name is Once and he usually spends his time searching different applications and I think with the help of applications a person is able to do anything by sitting at home, like shopping.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'that recommended by my friend' lacks the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the passive voice (Grammar Problem Type 3: There be issue). Also, 'he usually spend' should be 'he usually spends' (Grammar Problem Type 27: Subject-verb agreement). 'Searching different application' should be 'searching different applications' (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue). The phrase 'with the help of application person able to do anything' is missing 'a' before 'person' and 'is' before 'able' (Grammar Problem Type 3: There be issue). Suggestions: Use 'was recommended' for passive voice, ensure subject-verb agreement with 'spends', use plural 'applications', and include missing verbs and articles for clarity.

× There are a lot of apps that I use on my daily basis but I recently tried a shopping app that recommended by my friend whose name is once and he usually spend his time on searching different application and I think with the help of application person able to do anything by sitting at home so like shopping and.

✓ There are a lot of apps that I use on my daily basis but I recently tried a shopping app that was recommended by my friend whose name is Once and he usually spends his time searching different applications and I think with the help of applications a person is able to do anything by sitting at home, like shopping.

The phrase 'spend his time on searching' is incorrect; the preposition 'on' is unnecessary here. The correct form is 'spend his time searching'. Also, 'on my daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. Suggestions: Remove 'on' before 'searching' and use 'on a daily basis' instead of 'on my daily basis' for correct prepositional usage.

× he usually spend his time on searching different application

✓ he usually spends his time searching different applications

The subject 'he' requires the verb to be in third person singular form, so 'spend' should be 'spends'. Also, 'searching different application' should be plural 'applications'. Suggestions: Use 'spends' to agree with 'he' and pluralize 'applications'.

× ...a shopping app that recommended by my friend whose name is once...

✓ ...a shopping app that was recommended by my friend whose name is Once...

The phrase 'whose name is once' is awkward and unclear. 'Once' seems to be a name and should be capitalized. Also, the relative clause is missing 'was' to form passive voice. Suggestions: Capitalize 'Once' and include 'was' to form 'was recommended'.

× I think with the help of application person able to do anything by sitting at home so like shopping and.

✓ I think with the help of applications a person is able to do anything by sitting at home, like shopping.

The phrase 'with the help of application person able to do anything' is missing the article 'a' before 'person' and the verb 'is' before 'able'. Also, 'application' should be plural 'applications'. Suggestions: Add 'a' before 'person', 'is' before 'able', and use plural 'applications'.

× To be honest, there are lot of apps that I use but I usually interested and attracted towards the YouTube application that provide a lot of entertainment sources.

✓ To be honest, there are a lot of apps that I use but I am usually interested and attracted towards the YouTube application that provides a lot of entertainment sources.

The phrase 'there are lot of apps' is missing the article 'a' before 'lot'. Also, 'I usually interested' is missing the verb 'am'. 'That provide' should be 'that provides' to agree with singular 'application'. Suggestions: Use 'a lot of', include 'am' after 'I', and use 'provides' for subject-verb agreement.

× ...the YouTube application that provide a lot of entertainment sources.

✓ ...the YouTube application that provides a lot of entertainment sources.

The subject 'application' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' instead of 'provide'. Suggestions: Use singular verb form 'provides' to match singular subject.

× Along with this is also a lot of content related with my study that I use to complete my slaves.

✓ Along with this, there is also a lot of content related to my study that I use to complete my tasks.

The phrase 'content related with my study' should be 'content related to my study'. Also, 'complete my slaves' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'tasks' fits context better. Suggestions: Use 'related to' for correct preposition and replace 'slaves' with 'tasks'.

× Along with this is also a lot of content related with my study that I use to complete my slaves.

✓ Along with this, there is also a lot of content related to my study that I use to complete my tasks.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'Along with this' to form correct sentence structure. Suggestions: Include 'there is' or 'there is also' to complete the sentence.

× And next is BDMI application that I used to.

✓ And next is the BDMI application that I use.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Used to' implies past habit but lacks object or continuation. Likely intended to say 'that I use'. Suggestions: Complete the sentence by using 'that I use'.

× Sometimes I ask my friends whenever I want to try new apps and it is a famous website that available in my country is known as Playstar.

✓ Sometimes I ask my friends whenever I want to try new apps and there is a famous website available in my country known as Playstar.

The phrase 'it is a famous website that available' is incorrect; 'that' should be followed by 'is' or rephrased. Using 'there is' is appropriate to introduce existence. Suggestions: Use 'there is a famous website available' for correct structure.

× Sometimes I ask my friends whenever I want to try new apps and it is a famous website that available in my country is known as Playstar.

✓ Sometimes I ask my friends whenever I want to try new apps and there is a famous website available in my country known as Playstar.

The phrase 'available in my country' is correct, but the sentence structure is faulty. Removing 'that' and 'is' after 'website' improves clarity. Suggestions: Use 'website available in my country' without 'that is'.

× In future, I would like to use the app related with the shopping admin.

✓ In the future, I would like to use an app related to shopping administration.

The phrase 'In future' should be 'In the future'. 'Related with' should be 'related to'. 'Shopping admin' is unclear; 'shopping administration' or 'shopping apps' is better. Suggestions: Use 'In the future', 'related to', and clarify 'shopping admin'.

× In future, I would like to use the app related with the shopping admin.

✓ In the future, I would like to use an app related to shopping administration.

The preposition 'related with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'related to'. Suggestions: Use 'related to' for correct prepositional usage.

× I want to purchase different things by sitting at home and the app that provide a wide variety of products such as other goods related with the daily basis and home.

✓ I want to purchase different things by sitting at home and use an app that provides a wide variety of products such as other goods related to daily life and home.

The phrase 'the app that provide' should be 'the app that provides' for subject-verb agreement. 'Related with the daily basis' is incorrect; it should be 'related to daily life'. Suggestions: Use 'provides' and 'related to daily life'.