App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'I usually made my girlfriends from abroad from through this app'는 어색하며, 'I usually make friends from abroad through this app'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 부자연스러우므로 연결어를 사용해 보완하세요.

例: Recently, I have been using an app called Hello Talk, which is a language exchange platform. Through this app, I usually make friends from abroad. It has helped me learn French and broaden my perspective.

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'apps that provides'는 'apps that provide'로 수정해야 하며, 'flash card'는 복수형인 'flashcards'가 적절합니다. 또한, 문장 연결을 위해 'for example' 대신 'for instance'를 일관되게 사용하세요.

例: I am usually interested in apps that provide study materials. For instance, I have downloaded IELTS study apps and flashcards so that I can use them while commuting from work to home.

提案: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽습니다. 'I found'는 현재 시제인 'I find'가 더 적절하며, 'IL studying apps'는 오타로 보입니다. 'recommended me this'는 'recommended this to me'로 수정해야 합니다. 문장 연결을 위해 접속사를 활용하세요.

例: I usually find different apps through word of mouth. For example, I downloaded IELTS study apps and flashcards after reading blog reviews. Also, a friend recommended some apps to me.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨 있습니다. 'Proversion is helpful analyzing some financial data'는 'Proversion is helpful for analyzing financial data'로 수정해야 하며, 마지막 문장은 완성되어야 합니다. 또한, 문장 연결과 구체적인 설명이 필요합니다.

例: In the future, I would like to download apps related to my work, which involves financial analysis. For instance, Proversion is helpful for analyzing financial data, and I believe using such apps will improve my efficiency.

× The recent app I use is called Hello Talk which is a language exchange app.

✓ The recent app I have used is called Hello Talk, which is a language exchange app.

The sentence refers to a recent action, so the present perfect tense 'have used' is appropriate instead of simple present 'use'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' as it introduces a non-restrictive clause.

× I usually made my girlfriends from abroad from through this app.

✓ I usually make my girlfriends from abroad through this app.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual action, so the simple present tense 'make' should be used instead of past tense 'made'. Also, the preposition 'from' before 'through' is redundant and should be removed.

× This app helped me to learn French and broaden my perspective.

✓ This app has helped me to learn French and broaden my perspective.

Since the app's help is relevant to the present, present perfect 'has helped' is more appropriate than simple past 'helped'.

× I like to use apps that provides the materials.

✓ I like to use apps that provide the materials.

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'apps' which is plural, so the verb should be plural 'provide' instead of singular 'provides'.

× For instance, I downloaded IELTS study apps and flash card so that I can use while I commute from work to home.

✓ For instance, I downloaded IELTS study apps and flashcards so that I can use them while I commute from work to home.

'Flash card' should be plural 'flashcards' to match 'apps'. Also, 'use' should be followed by 'them' to clarify the object.

× I like to use apps that provides the materials.

✓ I like to use apps that provide materials.

The article 'the' before 'materials' is unnecessary unless referring to specific materials; removing it makes the sentence more natural.

× I found different apps through word of mouth.

✓ I find different apps through word of mouth.

The question is about a habitual action, so simple present 'find' is more appropriate than past tense 'found'.

× For instance, I downloaded IL studying apps and flash card through blog reviews.

✓ For instance, I downloaded IELTS study apps and flashcards through blog reviews.

'IL studying apps' seems to be a typo and should be 'IELTS study apps'. Also, 'flash card' should be plural 'flashcards' to match 'apps'.

× Also my friend recommended me this.

✓ Also, my friend recommended this to me.

The verb 'recommend' requires the object to be the thing recommended and the indirect object to be the person; 'recommended me this' is incorrect word order.

× Proversion is helpful analyzing some financial data, so I think it will increase my.

✓ Proversion is helpful in analyzing some financial data, so I think it will increase my efficiency.

The adjective 'helpful' should be followed by the preposition 'in' plus the gerund 'analyzing'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'efficiency' or another noun completes the thought.