App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「Instagrams」ではなく「Instagram」が正しいです。また、「lines」ではなく「LINE」が適切です。さらに、文章の繋がりがやや不明瞭で、より自然な英語表現を使うことが望ましいです。具体的な例や理由を明確に述べ、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

例: Recently, I have used several social networking apps like Instagram, WhatsApp, and LINE. However, I mostly use WhatsApp now because I live in France and all my friends use it too.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。「SNS」について話す際は、具体的にどのような点に興味があるのかを明確にし、正しい表現を使うことが重要です。また、「I can't get touch with my friend」は意味が不明瞭なので、正しいフレーズに直しましょう。

例: I am usually interested in social networking apps because they allow me to keep up with my friends' lives and stay connected easily.

提案: 回答が途中で途切れており、意味が伝わりにくいです。友達から新しいアプリを知ることを伝える際は、具体的な例を挙げて、文を完結にまとめることが大切です。また、繰り返しや不自然な表現を避け、論理的に話を展開しましょう。

例: I usually learn about new apps from my friends because they are very trendy. For example, they recently recommended a popular video app to me.

提案: 回答は将来使いたいアプリの種類を述べていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「became」ではなく「will become」が適切です。また、理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。具体的な健康管理の方法やアプリの機能についても触れると良いでしょう。

例: In the future, I would like to use healthcare apps because as I get older and busier with work, it will be harder to manage my health. These apps can help me monitor my condition regularly.

× I have used a lot of social network service like Instagrams, WhatsApp and lines.

✓ I have used a lot of social network services like Instagram, WhatsApp and Line.

'Social network service' should be plural 'services' because it refers to multiple apps. 'Instagrams' and 'lines' are incorrect plural forms; the correct names are 'Instagram' and 'Line'. Proper nouns for app names are singular and capitalized.

× Also my friends, all friends are using WhatsApp.

✓ Also, all my friends are using WhatsApp.

The phrase 'my friends, all friends' is redundant and awkward. 'All my friends' is the correct plural form and natural expression.

× I am usually interested in on the kinds of SNS because I can check my friends lives and my friends Internet so it makes me very reliable and I can't get touch with my friend.

✓ I am usually interested in kinds of SNS because I can check my friends' lives and their internet, so it makes me feel very connected and I can keep in touch with my friends.

The preposition 'in on' is incorrect; only 'interested in' is needed. 'Friends lives' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'friends' lives'. 'My friends Internet' should be 'their internet'. 'Reliable' is incorrect here; 'connected' or 'informed' fits better. 'Can't get touch' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'keep in touch'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends'.

× Oh I usually find out different apps from my friends. All all of my friends are very trendy but I am outdated person so for example my my friends tell me the up video it makes me very.

✓ Oh, I usually find out about different apps from my friends. All of my friends are very trendy, but I am an outdated person. For example, my friends tell me about new videos, which I find very interesting.

'Find out different apps' should be 'find out about different apps'. 'All all' and 'my my' are repetitions and should be removed. 'Outdated person' needs an article 'an'. 'Tell me the up video' is unclear; likely meant 'tell me about new videos'. The sentence was incomplete and needed clarification.

× In the future I became older and unhealthy because I have to work harder than now, so I may probably I can't control my health so I I have to check my health in up.

✓ In the future, I will become older and unhealthy because I will have to work harder than now, so I probably won't be able to control my health, and I will have to check my health with an app.

'Became' is past tense; future tense 'will become' is needed. 'Have to' should be future 'will have to'. 'May probably I can't' is incorrect modal usage; 'probably won't be able to' is correct. 'Check my health in up' should be 'check my health with an app'.