App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to keep your response within 4-5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas like convenience twice. For example, you can say: "Recently, I have been using Instagram and WhatsApp to keep in touch with my family and friends because they make communication easy. Additionally, I often watch short videos on YouTube to relax during my free time."

例: Recently, I have been using Instagram and WhatsApp to keep in touch with my family and friends because they make communication easy. Additionally, I often watch short videos on YouTube to relax during my free time.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it can be improved by using linking words and avoiding repetition of similar ideas like 'relax' and 'lift my mood'. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary. For example, you can say: "I am usually interested in Instagram because it is a useful and convenient app that helps me unwind after a busy day. Moreover, browsing photos and videos often inspires me and improves my mood."

例: I am usually interested in Instagram because it is a useful and convenient app that helps me unwind after a busy day. Moreover, browsing photos and videos often inspires me and improves my mood.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and clear. To improve, avoid unnecessary phrases like "That's such an interesting question" which do not add value. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example: "I usually explore the App Store because it offers a wide variety of apps sorted by popularity and user ratings. Additionally, I read online reviews or ask my friends for recommendations before downloading new apps."

例: I usually explore the App Store because it offers a wide variety of apps sorted by popularity and user ratings. Additionally, I read online reviews or ask my friends for recommendations before downloading new apps.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example: "Actually, I have never used Facebook before, but I am interested in trying it. Although my husband says there is nothing special on Facebook, I am curious to find out what it really offers."

例: Actually, I have never used Facebook before, but I am interested in trying it. Although my husband says there is nothing special on Facebook, I am curious to find out what it really offers.

× I often find myself to scroll the YouTube for short videos just to pass the time.

✓ I often find myself scrolling YouTube for short videos just to pass the time.

The phrase 'find myself' is followed by a verb in the '-ing' form, not the infinitive 'to' form. Therefore, 'to scroll' should be corrected to 'scrolling'. Also, 'the YouTube' is incorrect; 'YouTube' as a proper noun does not need 'the'.

× it is very useful and convenient app that helps me to relax my mind after a busy day

✓ it is a very useful and convenient app that helps me to relax my mind after a busy day

The noun 'app' is singular and requires an article before it. The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very useful and convenient app'.

× I also love to scroll the photos and videos which often inspire me to lift my mood.

✓ I also love to scroll through photos and videos which often inspire me to lift my mood.

The verb 'scroll' is commonly followed by the preposition 'through' when referring to browsing content. Therefore, 'scroll the photos' should be 'scroll through photos'. Also, 'the photos and videos' can be without 'the' unless referring to specific ones.

× Actually, I have never ever used the app whose name is Facebook.

✓ Actually, I have never ever used the app called Facebook.

The phrase 'whose name is Facebook' is awkward when referring to an app. It is better to say 'the app called Facebook' to indicate the name of the app.

× I never downloaded it.

✓ I have never downloaded it.

Since the context is about experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have never downloaded' is appropriate rather than simple past 'never downloaded'.

× I really have the keen interest to look out what is actually Facebook is.

✓ I really have a keen interest to find out what Facebook actually is.

The phrase 'the keen interest' should be 'a keen interest' as it is an indefinite interest. Also, 'look out what is actually Facebook is' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'find out what Facebook actually is'. The verb 'look out' is not used in this context.