App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer phrasing. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, you can say: "I have recently used a shopping app and a second-hand marketplace app. Both are very useful and convenient."

例: I have recently used a shopping app and a second-hand marketplace app. Both are very useful and convenient.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and more natural phrasing. Avoid filler words like "so so uh" and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, you can say: "I am usually interested in shopping apps because I am a big fan of online shopping. They are very useful and convenient, which attracts me a lot."

例: I am usually interested in shopping apps because I am a big fan of online shopping. They are very useful and convenient, which attracts me a lot.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and some repetition. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same phrase. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example: "I often discover new apps on the App Store or through recommendations from my friends. For instance, last time I downloaded a news app that a friend recommended."

例: I often discover new apps on the App Store or through recommendations from my friends. For instance, last time I downloaded a news app that a friend recommended.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use complete sentences. For example: "In the future, I would like to use financial apps because I am currently learning how to manage my finances. Even though I don't have much money, I think it's a good place to start."

例: In the future, I would like to use financial apps because I am currently learning how to manage my finances. Even though I don't have much money, I think it's a good place to start.

× I recently use a a shopping app and second hand. Return apps.

✓ I recently used a shopping app and a second-hand return app.

The sentence refers to a recent past action, so the verb should be in the past tense 'used' instead of 'use'. Also, 'a a' is a typo and 'second hand. Return apps' should be combined properly as 'second-hand return app' for clarity.

× I think both of them is very useful and convenient.

✓ I think both of them are very useful and convenient.

The subject 'both of them' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I usually interested in the shopping app because I am a big fan of shopping online.

✓ I am usually interested in shopping apps because I am a big fan of shopping online.

The verb 'interested' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present tense 'am interested'. Also, 'shopping app' should be plural 'shopping apps' to generalize the interest.

× So so uh, useful and convenient shopping app. Very attract me. Attracted me very much.

✓ So, useful and convenient shopping apps attract me very much.

The phrase 'Very attract me' is incorrect; the verb 'attract' should be used properly with the subject. 'Attracted me' is past tense but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'attract' is appropriate. Also, 'shopping app' should be plural to match the context.

× I often find out different app on the app Storey or through my friend recommend, Through my friends recommend.

✓ I often find different apps on the App Store or through my friends' recommendations.

The phrase 'find out different app' is incorrect; 'find' is sufficient without 'out'. 'App Storey' is a typo and should be 'App Store'. 'Friend recommend' should be 'friends' recommendations' to show possession and plural form.

× For example, last time I download a app that is about news is my friends recommended.

✓ For example, last time I downloaded an app about news that my friends recommended.

The action happened in the past, so 'download' should be 'downloaded'. 'A app' should be 'an app' because 'app' starts with a vowel sound. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I think it may be the financial apps because recently I am learning how to umm, how to regulate my finance.

✓ I think it might be financial apps because recently I have been learning how to regulate my finances.

'May be' can be replaced with 'might be' for better modal verb usage expressing possibility. 'I am learning' is present continuous, but 'have been learning' better expresses ongoing recent activity. 'Finance' should be plural 'finances' when referring to personal money management.

× Although I don't have many money but I think it is a good start to.

✓ Although I don't have much money, I think it is a good start too.

'Many' is used with countable nouns, but 'money' is uncountable, so 'much' is correct. The sentence needs a comma before 'but' or can be rephrased to avoid run-on. 'To' should be 'too' to mean 'also'.