App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more concise and clear by finishing your thoughts and avoiding repeated words. Also, add linking words to make your answer flow better.

例: Recently, I've been using different dating apps, and I redownloaded Hinge because I find it the most interesting among others. I like it since it allows me to send personalized messages, which makes conversations more engaging.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid leaving thoughts unfinished. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: I usually enjoy social networking apps like Instagram and TikTok. Recently, I prefer short-form videos because they entertain me while I pass time on the train or wait for friends, making those moments more enjoyable.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect your points and provide more specific details about how you discover new apps.

例: I usually find out about new apps through games I play on my iPad. For example, while playing a game recently, I discovered a new app that is like a grocery sorting game, which caught my interest.

提案: Complete your sentences and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to explain your thoughts and provide specific details about the app you imagine.

例: Although I haven't thought much about future apps, I recently imagined an app that connects content creators and customers. This app would allow users to share interesting products easily with just a click, making shopping more convenient.

× I quite I quite like it because it it allows me to send.

✓ I quite like it because it allows me to send.

The sentence contains repeated words 'I quite I quite' and 'it it' which are typographical errors. Removing the duplicates corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatically correct.

× Nowadays I am more inclined to short form videos which helps to entertain me as I pass time on the train or waiting for a friend at a store or shop.

✓ Nowadays I am more inclined towards short form videos which help to entertain me as I pass time on the train or while waiting for a friend at a store or shop.

The phrase 'inclined to' should be 'inclined towards' to correctly express preference. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural 'videos'. Adding 'while' before 'waiting' improves sentence clarity.

× I discovered that app from when I was playing another game, so I was able to.

✓ I discovered that app while I was playing another game, so I was able to.

The phrase 'from when' is incorrect here; 'while' is the appropriate preposition to indicate simultaneous actions.