App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two apps, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “an app,” “for payments”).

例: Recently I’ve used several apps, but the two I use most are WeChat and Alipay. For example, I use WeChat to chat with friends and join groups, while I use Alipay mainly for paying bills and making online purchases.

提案: Use correct tenses and sentence structure. Begin with a topic sentence naming the type of apps you like, then add specific supporting details (why you like it, how long you’ve played, and social aspects) using linking words such as “because” or “since.” Keep to 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: I’m usually interested in action and fighting games. For example, I’ve been playing a game called Wanderlong Yao since I was ten because it has exciting combat and a strong storyline. Also, I’ve made many friends in the game, which makes it more enjoyable.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and then explain the method with specific examples and linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “I find out,” “apps,” “what each app can do”) and avoid vague phrases.

例: I usually find new apps by comparing what each app can do and reading user reviews. For example, I check features and ratings in the app store and read friends’ recommendations to decide which app suits my needs.

提案: Be specific and use correct word choice and structure. Start with a clear preference (e.g., payment apps), explain why and give one or two specific future uses. Use linking words like “because” or “so that.”

例: In the future I would like to use more payment apps such as WeChat Pay or Alipay because they make paying at restaurants and online shopping much faster and more convenient.

× I recently used a lot of app but the most popular app in my country is WeChat Alipay because this is the app to use to chat with other people and pay from the company for the company.

✓ I recently used a lot of apps, but the most popular apps in my country are WeChat and Alipay because these apps are used to chat with other people and to pay companies.

The student used singular 'app' where plural 'apps' is required; also 'WeChat Alipay' should be treated as two apps and 'this is the app' should match plural. Change to plural nouns and adjust verbs ('are', 'these apps are used') to agree. Suggestion: identify items in a list with commas or 'and', use plural when referring to multiple items, and ensure verbs agree with plural subjects. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× I recently used a lot of app but the most popular app in my country is WeChat Alipay because this is the app to use to chat with other people and pay from the company for the company.

✓ I recently used a lot of apps, but the most popular apps in my country are WeChat and Alipay because these apps are used to chat with other people and to pay companies.

The sentence lacked proper punctuation and conjunction handling; adding a comma before 'but' improves clarity and separating items with 'and' fixes the run-on. Also 'pay from the company for the company' is unclear and should be 'to pay companies' or 'to make payments to companies'. Suggestion: use commas before contrasting conjunctions and simplify redundant phrases. (Grammar problem type ID: 16)

× I was really interesting in a games called Wanderlong Yao.

✓ I was really interested in a game called Wanderlong Yao.

The student used the adjective 'interesting' wrongly instead of the past participle 'interested' and used plural 'games' with 'a'. Use 'interested in' to express personal feeling and match singular 'a game'. Suggestion: use 'interested' for feelings and ensure 'a/an' with singular nouns. (Grammar problem type ID:22)

× This is a games from mainland and this is game like a fighting games and I think this was very interesting because I was play this game since I was 10 years old on this game.

✓ This is a game from the mainland and it is like a fighting game. I think it is very interesting because I have been playing this game since I was 10 years old.

Multiple plurality errors: 'a games' should be 'a game'; 'a fighting games' should be 'a fighting game'. Tense and aspect also needed correction: use present perfect continuous 'have been playing' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues. Suggestion: use singular with 'a', match noun phrases, and use present perfect continuous for ongoing activities. (Grammar problem type ID:1)

× I think this was very interesting because I was play this game since I was 10 years old on this game.

✓ I think it is very interesting because I have been playing this game since I was 10 years old.

The student mixed past simple 'was' with 'since' which requires present perfect or present perfect continuous to show duration from past to present. Also 'was play' is incorrect; use 'have been playing'. Suggestion: for actions that began in the past and continue now, use 'have/has' plus past participle (perfect) or 'have/has been' plus -ing (perfect continuous). (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× It's very interesting. I got a lot of friends in.

✓ It's very interesting. I have made a lot of friends through it.

'I got a lot of friends in' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use present perfect 'have made' to show the result up to now and 'through it' or 'in the game' to indicate where the friends were made. Suggestion: rephrase unclear colloquial structures into standard forms and use appropriate prepositional phrases. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× I found out different app by comparing what different app used to and what the different app can do for me.

✓ I find different apps by comparing what each app is used for and what each app can do for me.

Use present tense 'find' to match habitual action; 'app' should be plural 'apps' and 'used to' is incorrect here — use 'is used for'. 'Different app' and 'the different app' should be 'each app' or 'different apps'. Suggestion: use 'each' when comparing items and correct prepositional phrases like 'used for'. (Grammar problem type ID:11)

× I found out different app by comparing what different app used to and what the different app can do for me.

✓ I find different apps by comparing what each app is used for and what each app can do for me.

The student used past tense 'found' for a habitual present action; use simple present 'find' to describe regular behaviour. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and habits. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× In the future, I will more prefer to using some pavement like WeChat or Alipay to help to pay to restaurant or some online payment in the future.

✓ In the future, I will prefer to use payment apps like WeChat or Alipay to pay at restaurants or to make online payments.

'Will more prefer to using' is incorrect: 'prefer' does not normally take 'more' with 'will' in this way and should be followed by an infinitive 'to use'. 'Pavement' is the wrong word; 'payment apps' is correct. 'Help to pay to restaurant' should be 'pay at restaurants' and 'some online payment' should be 'online payments'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to do something' and choose correct vocabulary ('payment apps'), and use appropriate prepositions 'pay at' and 'make payments online'. (Grammar problem type ID:4)