Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，例如“found him boring”应为“find them boring”，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: No, I don't really like parties because I usually don't know many people there, which makes me feel shy. Also, I don't enjoy being the center of attention, so I prefer to avoid showing myself in front of others.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和断句不完整的问题，如“Visiting us.”应与前句合并。建议注意句子完整性，使用适当的连接词，并丰富细节使表达更具体。

例: When I was a kid, I had parties no more than three times a year because I lived with my grandparents, who are farmers in a village. We didn't have many relatives visiting us, and I didn't have many friends there, so parties were quite rare.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不完整的问题，如“plan the party at.”句子未完成。建议注意句子完整性，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: No, I have never organized a party because I only have a few close friends at my senior high school, which is far from my family home. Due to the long distance and our busy schedules, it is inconvenient for us to get together and celebrate.

× No I don't really like parties because I also found him boring and awkward for example as usually don't know many people there so I feel shy and know when to socialize with.

✓ No, I don't really like parties because I also find them boring and awkward. For example, I usually don't know many people there, so I feel shy and don't know when to socialize.

句子中时态不一致，前半句用现在时态表达喜好，后半句却用了过去时态“found”，应保持时态一致使用现在时态。此外，句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，需拆分成多个句子以表达清楚。

× No I don't really like parties because I also found him boring and awkward for example as usually don't know many people there so I feel shy and know when to socialize with.

✓ No, I don't really like parties because I also find them boring and awkward. For example, I usually don't know many people there, so I feel shy and don't know when to socialize.

句中使用了“him”指代“parties”，但“parties”是复数名词，应使用“them”作为代词。

× No I don't really like parties because I also found him boring and awkward for example as usually don't know many people there so I feel shy and know when to socialize with.

✓ No, I don't really like parties because I also find them boring and awkward. For example, I usually don't know many people there, so I feel shy and don't know when to socialize.

句中“know when to socialize with”缺少宾语，正确表达应为“know when to socialize”，不需要介词“with”。

× Also I don't enjoy being most in the attention so I prefer to avoid going on stage or showing myself in front of others.

✓ Also, I don't enjoy being the center of attention, so I prefer to avoid going on stage or showing myself in front of others.

短语“being most in the attention”不正确，应为“being the center of attention”，这里“attention”是不可数名词，且需要使用固定搭配。

× I think I have parties no more than three times a year, which I was a kid.

✓ I think I had parties no more than three times a year when I was a kid.

句中描述过去的情况，应使用过去时态“had”而非现在时态“have”。

× I think I have parties no more than three times a year, which I was a kid.

✓ I think I had parties no more than three times a year when I was a kid.

“which I was a kid”结构不正确，应使用时间状语“when I was a kid”来表达时间。

× This is because I lived with my grandparents who are farmers living in the village, so we didn't have many relatives. Visiting us.

✓ This is because I lived with my grandparents who are farmers living in the village, so we didn't have many relatives visiting us.

“Visiting us.”是不完整的句子，应与前句合并形成完整句子。

× Also I didn't have many friends there which made it less likely to have parties often.

✓ Also, I didn't have many friends there, which made it less likely to have parties often.

句中无明显单复数错误，但缺少逗号，影响句子结构清晰。此处主要是标点符号问题。

× No, I have never organized the party before because I only have a few close friends at my Senior High School, which is quite far from where my family lives.

✓ No, I have never organized a party before because I only have a few close friends at my Senior High School, which is quite far from where my family lives.

“the party”应改为不定冠词“a party”，因为这里指的是任何一个派对，而非特定的派对。

× To do the long distance and busy schedules, it is inconvenient for us to get together and celebrate.

✓ Due to the long distance and busy schedules, it is inconvenient for us to get together and celebrate.

“To do the long distance and busy schedules”表达不正确，应使用介词短语“Due to the long distance and busy schedules”表示原因。

× Therefore, I haven't had the chance to plan the party at.

✓ Therefore, I haven't had the chance to plan a party.

句尾“at”无明确指代，导致句子不完整，应去掉“at”并简化句子。