Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi phát âm và sử dụng từ chính xác hơn, ví dụ như 'gathering' thay vì 'guttering'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I love parties because they are a great way to gather people and enjoy interesting activities. Moreover, parties help people strengthen their relationships.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến thì động từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ. Ngoài ra, tránh câu hỏi ngược lại không cần thiết và nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: When I was a kid, I didn't have many parties because my family was quite strict and I was busy studying. However, when I did have parties, they usually took place on weekends at my friends' houses.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sắp xếp ý tưởng mạch lạc, sử dụng thì đúng và hoàn chỉnh câu. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời đầy đủ và dễ hiểu hơn.

例: Yes, I have organized a party before. I remember it was at my previous company when I held a birthday party for my leaders. They felt very appreciated and enjoyed the celebration.

× I think it's a great way to guttering people Ann and do some activities that interesting.

✓ I think it's a great way to gather people and do some interesting activities.

The verb 'guttering' is incorrect; the correct form is 'gather' as the base verb after 'way to'. Also, 'activities that interesting' should be 'interesting activities' to use the adjective correctly before the noun.

× I think it also applies for people to strengthen their connection.

✓ I think it also helps people to strengthen their connections.

The phrase 'applies for people' is incorrect; 'helps people' is more appropriate here. Also, 'connection' should be plural 'connections' to refer to relationships generally.

× Well, I don't have party much when I was a kid because my family is quite strict and I'm also busy in studying.

✓ Well, I didn't have parties much when I was a kid because my family was quite strict and I was also busy studying.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a kid'. It should be past tense 'didn't have'. 'Party' should be plural 'parties'. 'My family is' should be 'my family was' to match past tense. 'Busy in studying' should be 'busy studying'.

× But when I have party I usually will have at weekends at my friends.

✓ But when I had parties, I usually had them on weekends at my friends' houses.

The sentence refers to past habits, so past tense 'had' is needed instead of 'have' and 'will have'. Also, 'at weekends' is better as 'on weekends'. 'At my friends' should be 'at my friends' houses' for clarity.

× Yes, I have organized a party I am I remember that was when I was in my previous company.

✓ Yes, I have organized a party. I remember that was when I was in my previous company.

The sentence is run-on and confusing. Adding a period after 'party' separates the ideas. 'I am' is unnecessary and should be removed.

× Well, I my college and I hold a birthday party for my leaders and they fell very appreciated because we.

✓ Well, in my college, I held a birthday party for my leaders and they felt very appreciated because of it.

The sentence is incomplete and has missing words. 'I my college' should be 'In my college'. 'Hold' should be past tense 'held'. 'Fell' is incorrect; it should be 'felt'. The sentence needs completion for clarity.