Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use simpler sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, specify the types of parties and explain why you enjoy them to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I like parties very much. I usually attend parties at my friends' or neighbours' houses two or three times a week. These gatherings help me relax and relieve stress after a busy week.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about the frequency and types of parties you attended as a child.

例: When I was a child, I rarely went to parties because my parents were quite strict. However, I often attended family gatherings, which were the only parties I was allowed to go to.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and add more specific details about the party you organized.

例: Yes, I have organized many parties. For example, last year I arranged a big party for my sister's wedding. I invited several friends and prepared drinks and food for everyone to enjoy.

× Every week twice or thrice I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends and neighbor parties.

✓ I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends' and neighbors' parties twice or thrice every week.

The adverbial phrase 'twice or thrice every week' should be placed after the verb phrase for natural English word order. Also, possessive forms are needed for 'friends' and 'neighbors' to indicate their parties.

× I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends and neighbor parties.

✓ I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends' and neighbors' parties.

The phrase 'go to my friends and neighbor parties' lacks possessive apostrophes and plural form for 'neighbor'. It should be 'friends'' and 'neighbors'' to show possession of the parties.

× These parties, these things will give a stress relief to us.

✓ These parties and events will give us stress relief.

The phrase 'these things' is vague and unnecessary. Also, 'a stress relief' is incorrect; 'stress relief' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article. 'Give us stress relief' is the correct expression.

× Every week twice or thrice I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends and neighbor parties.

✓ I used to celebrate parties and go to my friends' and neighbors' parties twice or thrice every week.

The phrase 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual action, but the adverb placement needs correction for clarity and naturalness.

× Most often they were only sent me to the family parties.

✓ Most often, they only sent me to family parties.

The phrase 'they were only sent me' is incorrect. The correct active voice is 'they only sent me'. Also, 'the family parties' should be 'family parties' unless referring to specific known parties.

× Other than that, I was strictly known.

✓ Other than that, I was strictly not allowed to go out.

The phrase 'I was strictly known' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning seems to be restriction, so 'I was strictly not allowed to go out' conveys the meaning properly.

× One of the biggest party I have organized in my last year is my for my sister's marriage.

✓ One of the biggest parties I organized last year was for my sister's marriage.

'One of the biggest party' should be 'one of the biggest parties' because 'one of the' requires plural noun. Also, 'in my last year' is unnatural; 'last year' is correct. 'Is my for my sister's marriage' is incorrect; 'was for my sister's marriage' fits past tense.

× One of the biggest party I have organized in my last year is my for my sister's marriage.

✓ One of the biggest parties I organized last year was for my sister's marriage.

The event happened in the past, so past tense 'organized' and 'was' are appropriate instead of present perfect and present tense.

× So I invited few of my friends for the celebrations.

✓ So I invited a few of my friends to the celebrations.

'Few' without 'a' implies almost none, which is negative. 'A few' means some, which is positive and appropriate here. Also, 'invited ... for the celebrations' should be 'invited ... to the celebrations'.

× I arranged some drinks and food items to have with them.

✓ I arranged some drinks and food items to have with them.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'to have with them' is slightly awkward. A better phrasing could be 'I arranged some drinks and food items to share with them.' However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes from the list, this is acceptable.