Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复表达，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I don't really like parties because socializing with strangers can be overwhelming and drain my energy. Therefore, I prefer to relax by myself instead of attending parties.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，数字表达不准确。建议明确表达次数，使用正确的语法，并且丰富细节使回答更具体。

例: I had about eight parties a year when I was a kid, mostly during small festivals. In China, these festivals are usually family reunions, so I attended the parties with my parents.

提案: 回答较为完整且内容丰富，但可以通过使用更多连接词使句子更流畅自然。建议适当调整句子结构，增加连接词以增强连贯性。

例: Yes, I organized my friend's wedding reception about two months ago. I planned everything, from sending invitations to arranging food and decorations, which made the event very special. It was rewarding to see everyone enjoying themselves and celebrating the big day.

× Not really, I'm not a party animal as socializing as could always make me feel overwhelmed as talking with strangers always causes lots of energy of mine.

✓ Not really, I'm not a party animal as socializing can always make me feel overwhelmed and talking with strangers always consumes a lot of my energy.

句中使用了多个“as”连接，导致句子结构混乱，应使用合适的连词“and”连接两个并列的句子部分。

× talking with strangers always causes lots of energy of mine.

✓ talking with strangers always consumes a lot of my energy.

“causes lots of energy of mine”表达不正确，应该用“consume energy”表示“消耗能量”，且“of mine”应改为“my”修饰energy。

× So instead of attending parties I would just like to relax for myself.

✓ So instead of attending parties, I would just like to relax by myself.

“relax for myself”用法错误，正确表达应为“relax by myself”，表示“独自放松”。

× About 8 * a year, especially in insignificant festivals.

✓ About 8 times a year, especially during insignificant festivals.

“8 * a year”表达不完整，应补充“times”表示次数，且“in insignificant festivals”应改为“during insignificant festivals”表示时间段。

× in China it is often for a whole family to reunion in these kinds of festivals,

✓ in China it is common for a whole family to reunite during these kinds of festivals,

“to reunion”错误，应使用动词不定式“to reunite”；“in these kinds of festivals”应改为“during these kinds of festivals”表示时间。

× I just just have to attend the parties with my parents.

✓ I just had to attend the parties with my parents.

描述过去习惯动作，应使用过去时态“had to”而非现在时“have to”。

× Yeah, I have organized the wedding reception for my friend about two months ago.

✓ Yeah, I organized the wedding reception for my friend about two months ago.

“about two months ago”明确表示过去时间，故应使用一般过去时“organized”，而非现在完成时“have organized”。

× which made the event very special and it's rewarding to see everyone enjoying themselves and celebrating the big day.

✓ which made the event very special, and it was rewarding to see everyone enjoying themselves and celebrating the big day.

句中“and it's rewarding”连接不当，应分开为两个独立分句，且时态保持一致，改为“it was rewarding”。