Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is positive but a bit repetitive and unnatural. Try to use more natural expressions and avoid repeating similar words like 'moments' twice. Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

例: Yes, I enjoy parties because they are a great opportunity to have fun and create memorable experiences with friends and family.

提案: Your answer is unclear and a bit off-topic. Instead of criticizing the question, try to answer it directly. Explain how often you attended parties as a child, and give specific examples like weddings or birthdays. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: When I was a kid, I attended parties mainly during weddings and birthdays. Although we didn't have parties in pubs, these family gatherings were very special and happened a few times each year.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to speak more confidently and use correct grammar. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'. Make your sentences clear and complete.

例: No, I have not organized a party yet, but if I get the opportunity in the future, I would love to host one. It would be a great way to meet new people and strengthen family bonds.

× Yes, I love parties where we can enjoy each and every moment with breathtaking moments.

✓ Yes, I love parties where we can enjoy every moment with breathtaking experiences.

The phrase 'each and every moment with breathtaking moments' is redundant and awkward. Using 'every moment' is sufficient and 'breathtaking experiences' is more appropriate than repeating 'moments'. This improves clarity and naturalness.

× I think this question is not good enough because I'm a person who's living in India and I don't prefer going to party and our party belongs to wedding, birthday parties and so on.

✓ I think this question is not good enough because I'm a person who lives in India and I don't prefer going to parties; our parties are usually weddings, birthday parties, and so on.

The phrase 'who's living' should be 'who lives' to express a habitual action. 'Going to party' should be 'going to parties' to use the plural form correctly. Also, 'our party belongs to wedding, birthday parties' is incorrect; it should be 'our parties are usually weddings, birthday parties' to correctly describe types of parties.

× So we will not have a party wish like others in pubs and all.

✓ So we do not have parties like others do in pubs and so on.

The phrase 'have a party wish' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'do not have parties like others do' to express the intended meaning. 'And all' is informal; 'and so on' is more appropriate.

× No, up to today I didn't organize any party, but in the coming days, if I'm getting a chance, I will definitely try to organize a party and uh, make a chance to meet new peoples, which will uh, help my family to in.

✓ No, up to today I have not organized any party, but in the coming days, if I get a chance, I will definitely try to organize a party and make an opportunity to meet new people, which will help my family.

'Didn't organize' should be 'have not organized' to indicate an action up to the present. 'If I'm getting a chance' should be 'if I get a chance' for correct conditional tense. 'Make a chance' is incorrect; 'make an opportunity' or 'create a chance' is better. 'New peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and does not take 's'. The phrase 'help my family to in' is incomplete and should be 'help my family'.