Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief reason using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect word forms (use 'introverted' not 'introverse').

例: Yes, I enjoy organizing small parties. For example, I like planning the guest list and decorations because I prefer intimate gatherings where I can connect with people one-on-one.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about frequency and add one detail to support it. Remove fillers like 'uh'.

例: As a child I attended birthday parties almost every month. Because many classmates had birthdays close together, our parents frequently organized small celebrations after school.

提案: Answer directly, use past tense consistently, and link sentences smoothly. Provide a specific example of what you did and how it felt, avoiding fillers.

例: Yes, I have organized parties, particularly at primary school. I lived in a school dormitory, so we often held birthday parties where I helped prepare snacks and drinks, which created lovely memories for everyone.

× I am a kind of introverse person.

✓ I am somewhat introverted.

'Introverse' is not the correct adjective; the correct adjective is 'introverted'. 'A kind of' is informal and awkward; 'somewhat' or 'a bit' fits better. Use 'introverted' to describe personality traits.

× I may not have party goers because I am a kind of introverse person.

✓ I may not have partygoers because I am somewhat introverted.

'Party goers' should be one word 'partygoers' or hyphenated; also keep noun form consistent. Combined with corrected adjective and improved phrasing, the sentence becomes natural.

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid?

✓ How often did you have parties when you were a kid?

When asking about habitual past actions, use the plural 'parties' (pluralization) to match frequency adverbs. The past tense 'did you have' is correct; only the noun number needed adjustment.

× I remember when I was elementary school student, I often went to classmates birthday party almost every month.

✓ I remember when I was an elementary school student, I often went to my classmates' birthday parties almost every month.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before 'elementary school student'; possessive apostrophe and plural needed for 'classmates' birthdays' (correct: classmates' birthday parties) and plural 'parties' to match 'almost every month.' Also add possessive 'my' for clarity.

× Ah yes, I have, especially when I was an elementary school student.

✓ Ah yes, I have, especially when I was an elementary school student.

'I have' (present perfect) can be used for experience, but following 'especially when I was...' refers to the past; this sentence is acceptable as is. No grammatical correction required.

× I live in a school dorm and we often have a birthday party.

✓ I lived in a school dorm and we often had birthday parties.

The speaker refers to past time ('when I was an elementary school student'), so use past tense 'lived' and 'had'. Also 'birthday party' should be plural 'birthday parties' for habitual events.

× We prepare snacks, food, and drinks, and those are very, uh, fond memories.

✓ We prepared snacks, food, and drinks, and those are very fond memories.

Change verbs to past tense 'prepared' to match past context. Remove filler 'uh' and keep 'very fond memories' — 'fond' correctly describes 'memories.'