Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like 'across walks' and 'go with our visit near places by walk only'. Try to use correct vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks in my hometown because most people prefer walking to nearby places. Moreover, walking is considered healthy and the safest mode of travel here.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use simpler sentences and correct vocabulary like 'footpaths' instead of 'foot parts'. Also, organise your ideas logically with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, if I had the chance, I would add more traffic signals and footpaths in my area. The roads are often congested, making it difficult for people, including me, to cross safely on the way to school.

× Yes, there are a lot of across walks around my hometown as everyone likes to go with our visit near places by walk only and moreover, we all believe that walking is very beneficial for her health and it is the safest way of traveling.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks around my hometown as everyone likes to visit nearby places by walking only and moreover, we all believe that walking is very beneficial for our health and it is the safest way of traveling.

The phrase 'across walks' is incorrect; the correct term is 'crosswalks'. The preposition 'with our visit near places by walk only' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'visit nearby places by walking only'. Also, 'her health' is incorrect as the subject is plural 'we', so it should be 'our health'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, definitely if I would get a chance to change something in my locality ever, definitely add some traffic signals and of some foot parts in my area because the roads usually are more congested and it is difficult for a native people a true cross the roads in such a traffic and I to go to school from by.

✓ Yes, definitely if I ever get a chance to change something in my locality, I would definitely add some traffic signals and some footpaths in my area because the roads are usually very congested and it is difficult for native people to cross the roads in such traffic and I go to school by walking.

The sentence has multiple prepositional errors: 'if I would get' should be 'if I ever get' to correctly express the conditional; 'of some foot parts' should be 'some footpaths'; 'a true cross' should be 'to cross'; 'in such a traffic' should be 'in such traffic'; 'I to go to school from by' is incorrect and should be 'I go to school by walking'. These corrections make the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.