Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在错误，建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，并且使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks near my home because the government has invested a lot of money in pedestrian infrastructure. This makes it very convenient for people to walk safely.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议先明确表达想法，然后用完整句子和连接词详细说明原因。

例: I would like to improve the traffic flow in some areas because certain places are far apart, making it inconvenient to travel. Therefore, building more bus stops could help people commute more easily.

× Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks near Milo. Because the government invites invest must money in pedestrian infrastructure in frustration is very convenient for our daily lives.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks near Milo because the government invests a lot of money in pedestrian infrastructure, which makes it very convenient for our daily lives.

原句中存在句子结构混乱，‘Because’引导的从句不能单独成句，且‘invites invest must money’表达不正确，应改为‘invests a lot of money’。建议将两个句子合并，使用定语从句‘which makes it very convenient’来表达原因和结果。

× I want to change in the traffic maybe the other parts. Because some places. Is not. Is is in the near? And there is a far from each other, so the opus can be. Can be erected for convenient.

✓ I want to change some parts of the traffic because some places are not near each other, and they are far apart, so bus stops can be erected for convenience.

原句断句不当，句子不完整且语序混乱，如‘Is not. Is is in the near?’不符合语法，应改为完整句子‘some places are not near each other’。‘opus’应为‘bus stops’或类似词，‘can be erected for convenient’应改为‘can be erected for convenience’。建议重组句子，使表达清晰连贯。