Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在较多错误，导致意思难以理解。建议回答时先明确主题句，然后用简洁的句子补充细节，避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks around where I live. This makes it very convenient and safe for people to cross the streets.

提案: 你的回答缺乏连贯性和完整的句子结构，表达不清楚。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持观点，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I would like to see more motor vehicles in my area because currently, only bicycles are common. Having more cars would make transportation faster and more convenient.

× Yes, of course what and where I lived there they are manning crosswords around I lived placed where is very convenient for people to for people go.

✓ Yes, of course, where I live, there are many crosswalks around. The place where I live is very convenient for people to go around.

原句结构混乱，缺少连贯性，导致句意不清。应拆分为多个句子，明确主语和谓语，使表达清晰。建议多使用简单句，避免句子过长或结构复杂。

× I think and if if there have the mobile car is very convenient because then on in my hometown just only have the bicycle so.

✓ I think having a car is very convenient because in my hometown, there are only bicycles.

原句中“if if there have the mobile car”结构错误，模态动词使用不当，且句子不完整。应使用动名词“having”表达拥有某物的概念，简化句子结构，使表达更自然。