Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs to be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. For example, instead of repeating 'no' and 'because', you can say 'No, there are not many crosswalks because the area is peaceful and surrounded by nature, so traffic is minimal as most people do not use vehicles.'

例: No, there are not many crosswalks because the area where I live is peaceful and surrounded by nature. Therefore, traffic is minimal since most people prefer walking or cycling instead of using vehicles.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and better vocabulary. Use linking words to explain your ideas logically. Also, avoid grammatical errors and be specific. For example, you can say 'Yes, I would like to widen the narrow roads in my area so that larger vehicles and buses can pass easily, which would help reduce traffic congestion.'

例: Yes, I would like to widen the narrow roads in my neighborhood. This change would allow larger vehicles and buses to pass through easily, which would help reduce traffic congestion and make commuting smoother.

× So traffic, there is not much more traffic or cross work.

✓ So, there is not much traffic or crosswalks.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'there is not much more traffic or cross work.' The phrase 'more traffic' is unnecessary and 'cross work' is incorrect; it should be 'crosswalks.' The correct structure is 'there is not much traffic or crosswalks.' This follows the correct 'there be' construction and proper noun usage.

× So traffic, there is not much more traffic or cross work.

✓ So, there is not much traffic or crosswalks.

The word 'cross work' is incorrect; the correct plural form is 'crosswalks.' Using the correct plural noun is important to match the context and meaning.

× I do like to change.

✓ I would like to change.

The phrase 'I do like to change' is awkward and incorrect in this context. The correct expression is 'I would like to change,' which properly expresses a desire or wish.

× The place where I am living has a very small Rd.

✓ The place where I live has a very small road.

The phrase 'where I am living' is less natural here; 'where I live' is preferred for general statements. Also, 'Rd.' should be written as 'road' for clarity. The preposition use is acceptable but the verb tense and abbreviation need correction.

× So I want to diverse the road bigger so that any kinds of vehicle or any kinds of buses can pass through it and can remove the traffic or make the traffic easier.

✓ So I want to widen the road so that all kinds of vehicles and buses can pass through it and reduce the traffic or make traffic easier.

The word 'diverse' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'widen.' Also, 'any kinds of vehicle or any kinds of buses' should be 'all kinds of vehicles and buses' to correctly quantify and pluralize the nouns. 'Remove the traffic' is incorrect; 'reduce the traffic' is appropriate. The phrase 'make the traffic easier' should be 'make traffic easier' or 'ease the traffic.' These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.