Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to make your sentences grammatically correct and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid sentence fragments. Also, use more precise vocabulary like 'pedestrians' instead of 'people' and 'crosswalks' instead of 'crossovers'.

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks around where I live because it is an industrial area. Consequently, a large number of pedestrians commute to work daily, especially during the morning and evening. These crosswalks help ensure their safety while crossing busy roads.

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to explain reasons. Also, avoid repetition and use correct terms like 'traffic lights' instead of 'red green signal'.

例: I would like to suggest changing the traffic light timings at the junction. Currently, some lanes have longer green lights while others wait longer on red, which causes some drivers to jump the signal. Adjusting the timings could improve traffic flow and safety.

× Yes, there are lot of crosswalks around the place where I am live.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks around the place where I live.

The phrase 'are lot of crosswalks' is missing the article 'a' before 'lot'. Also, 'I am live' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I live' because 'live' is a verb here, not an adjective. The sentence should be 'there are a lot of crosswalks around the place where I live.'

× Yes, there are lot of crosswalks around the place where I am live.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks around the place where I live.

The phrase 'I am live' incorrectly uses the verb 'am' with 'live'. The correct present tense form for the verb 'live' with 'I' is simply 'I live'.

× As this is an industrial area, there are lot of people and pedestrians who are going to work on a regular basis.

✓ As this is an industrial area, there are a lot of people and pedestrians who go to work on a regular basis.

Again, 'are lot of people' is missing the article 'a' before 'lot'. Also, 'are going to work' suggests a continuous action, but the context implies a habitual action, so 'who go to work' is more appropriate.

× As this is an industrial area, there are lot of people and pedestrians who are going to work on a regular basis.

✓ As this is an industrial area, there are a lot of people and pedestrians who go to work on a regular basis.

The phrase 'are going to work on a regular basis' mixes present continuous with habitual action. For habitual actions, simple present tense 'go to work' is correct.

× During morning and Evening Times.

✓ During morning and evening times,

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and subject. It should be connected to the previous or next sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence. Also, 'Evening Times' should not be capitalized.

× We can observe more number of people going.

✓ We can observe a greater number of people going.

The phrase 'more number of people' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a greater number of people'. Also, 'going' is vague; it would be better to specify where or what they are doing.

× So crossovers will help them for safety purpose.

✓ So crosswalks will help them for safety purposes.

'Crossovers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'crosswalks'. Also, 'for safety purpose' should be pluralized to 'for safety purposes' to be idiomatic.

× I would like to recommend to change the signal timings in the junction.

✓ I would like to recommend changing the signal timings at the junction.

The verb 'recommend' is followed by a gerund ('changing'), not an infinitive ('to change'). Also, 'in the junction' should be 'at the junction'.

× Sometimes one line will be having red green signal for more time and comparing to other times the red signal will be having more time.

✓ Sometimes one lane has the red-green signal for a longer time, and compared to other times, the red signal lasts longer.

'One line' should be 'one lane'. 'Will be having' is awkward; simple present 'has' is better for habitual actions. 'Comparing to other times' should be 'compared to other times'. 'More time' should be 'a longer time' or 'lasts longer'.

× Due to this one one line is getting jumped.

✓ Due to this, one lane is being jumped.

The phrase 'one one line' is a repetition error; it should be 'one lane'. 'Is getting jumped' is awkward; 'is being jumped' is better to indicate the action of vehicles jumping the signal. Also, a comma is needed after 'Due to this'.