Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and give a more structured answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks around my neighborhood because the streets are very busy. Therefore, having crosswalks is essential to ensure pedestrian safety.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about what changes you want and why, to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I would like to improve the traffic situation because my commute takes about an hour each way. For example, reducing the number of cars and encouraging more people to use bicycles would help decrease congestion and pollution.

× Yeah, that's a lot, umm, crosswalks where I live because there are busy streets and umm, just it's necessary to have crosswalks.

✓ Yeah, there are a lot of crosswalks where I live because there are busy streets and, umm, it's necessary to have crosswalks.

The phrase 'that's a lot, umm, crosswalks' incorrectly uses 'that's' (that is) with a plural noun 'crosswalks'. The correct form is 'there are a lot of crosswalks' to agree with the plural noun. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1). To improve, always match the verb form with the noun number: use 'there is' for singular and 'there are' for plural.

× Yeah, of course I would like to change traffic, because in the morning I spend just one hour to get to work and almost same time back home.

✓ Yeah, of course I would like to change the traffic, because in the morning I spend just one hour getting to work and almost the same time getting back home.

The phrase 'I spend just one hour to get to work' is incorrect because 'spend' is usually followed by a gerund (-ing form) to indicate the activity. Also, 'almost same time back home' lacks the article 'the' and the verb form. This is a past tense issue (ID 5) and verb + -ing form issue (ID 8). To improve, use 'spend one hour getting to work' and 'almost the same time getting back home' to express duration and activity correctly.